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on Wed Oct 01, 2014 3:24 am

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You're ok I do believe I may not be as clear as I thought I was being either.

For the transferring ability, Mei must inflict the same amount of damage she is transferring. An example would be if Mei gave someone a small cut she would only be allowed to transfer a small cut. She cannot simply inflict a small cut upon an opponent and transfer a massive slash across them. From the example you have given, the wound she inflicted to the one she has healed do not match so she would not be able to transfer the wound. So, basically she can only transfer a wound that matches one she has given.

For the healing ability, Mei cannot heal herself only her allies. I also understand that the abilities are separate and if I have to train one of them then I will. No big deal. ^^

Also, I understand. Don't worry about it I am happy to fix any problems there may be.

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on Wed Oct 01, 2014 6:56 pm

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Alright so let me get this straight..

Transferring ability: Once you've absorbed a certain amount of damage into the zanpakuto and then cause a certain amount of damage, the equivalent amount of damage can further be transferred to the opponent. Hence doubling the effect. Is that correct?

on Wed Oct 01, 2014 8:17 pm

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Yes. That's basically it.

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on Sat Oct 04, 2014 1:54 pm

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Alright before I get to grading this, now that we have discussed and cleared our suspicions I think you should rewrite the ability. Explain both abilities separately, and in light of the discussion we've had. After that's done, I'll grade the app. I know tis has been troublesome but just a little bit more and you're there. Ganbare Mei-chan!

on Sun Oct 05, 2014 2:18 am

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Edited!

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on Sun Oct 05, 2014 3:44 pm

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Quantity:

Appearance: 3+ paragraphs
Personality: 4 paragraphs
History: 9+
Rp Sample: The thread is still on going and Mei's posts comprise of two or three well written paras, sometimes a single para but well written.

Quality: The app has a few spelling errors here and there but nothing major, tis a well written app and a good read.

Grade: After looking at the battle specs I think the app would deserve a higher rank but seeing that the personal ability and general techs are missing, I'll approve this for 4-2.

Battle specs: Time for your battle specs:

You have no personal ability and thus no general technique, are you sure you want it that way? Once approved if you wish for an ability, you'll have to get it approved, then earn it IC via training. This is quite a major part of an app and since it's missing I can't help but be a bit disappointed, my approved tier will be affected by this.

No shikai techniques either? well, those will have to be approved and earned IC too, are you like.. .really sure you want that?

Spell Name: Raikoho
Spell Type: Hado
Spell Number: #63
Spell Incantation: Sprinkled on the bones of the beast! Sharp tower. red crystal, steel ring. Move and become wind, stop and become the calm. The sound of warring spears fills the empty castle!
Spell Effect: The user gathers energy in their palm, which is then released as yellow lightning. It has destructive results.

Spell Name: Sajo Sabaku
Spell Type: Bakudo
Spell Number: #63
Spell Incantation: Not used
Spell Effect: The user lifts their palm to a target and closes their fist. This draws yellow ropes of energy towards the targets upper body.

Considering the tier you'll be getting, these kido are a bit too high for your character to know. These are denied, the rest is okay.

Note: Initially I liked the app but I read battle specs at the very end, after realizing that the app lacks:
- Personal ability
- General techs
- Shikai techs

I was a bit disappointed, the zanpakuto ability is good, it would be great to see a character ability that goes along with it. If you are sure that you don't want to add any of these three, then remove the two kido mentioned above and you have my approval for tier 4-2.

on Mon Oct 06, 2014 12:29 am

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Personal ability and General tech added.

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on Mon Oct 06, 2014 12:51 am

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Name: Pain-inducting reiatsu
Effect: Mei has a special reiatsu that causes any part of the body that touches her reiatsu to trigger the pain signals in that part of the body that touched; similar to a spinal reflex when you touch a burning candle with your finger and you pull your finger away before the signal even has time to reach your brain. this only APPLIES to tiers below Mei's current tier, equal tiers and above can guard against it with their own reiatsu to nullify the effect.
How long will this pain last? If the ability only induces pain then I don't think it needs a cool down. I leave this ability to the second grader, it's okay by me.


Spell Name: Raikoho
Spell Type: Hado
Spell Number: #63
Spell Incantation: Sprinkled on the bones of the beast! Sharp tower. red crystal, steel ring. Move and become wind, stop and become the calm. The sound of warring spears fills the empty castle!
Spell Effect: The user gathers energy in their palm, which is then released as yellow lightning. It has destructive results.

Spell Name: Sajo Sabaku
Spell Type: Bakudo
Spell Number: #63
Spell Incantation: Not used
Spell Effect: The user lifts their palm to a target and closes their fist. This draws yellow ropes of energy towards the targets upper body.

I said earlier, these two need to be removed.

Technique Name: Advanced close combat training
Technique Description: At the academy when Kyōyū tōtsū was first created, Mei trained extra hard during close combat classes to futher develop her abilities in close combat, higher then a normal student would. AR+1 in close combat situations.

Not a technique more of an ability.

on Mon Oct 06, 2014 11:54 pm

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After you have done what Epizon had told you with the abilities, you have my approval on this app for Tier 4-1. I think it is better than a lot of the current 4-2 apps out there and it is written very well, despite many choppy sentences throughout. I'll leave this decision to a third staffer to vote. You may want to PM Eden.

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on Tue Dec 09, 2014 4:58 am

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Sorry its been a while but I'm back! Anyway, I have done everything asked except I had one question. Would I be able to move the Advance Close Combat Training from General Tech to abilities as well? I'm not too sure on what to do with it.

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