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on Tue May 27, 2014 11:45 am





Who are you?





Name: Mushami Shuuryou
Alias: Mushami
Age: 11
Age of Appearance: 18
Gender: Male
Race/Species: Shinigami
Character Alignment: Neutral Good

Appearance:


Skin as soft as a newborn's. A sleek and slender little body, a beautiful deep brown complexion smooth as marble. Full shapely lips and almond shaped eyes which are a captivating lavender in colored. The long thick eyelashes are a thing of wonder. These are a few of the things that make Mushami, Shuuryou the piece of eye candy HE is.

He has high cheek bones, a soft yet defined jawline and long elegant neck. He has smaller, 'dainty' looking hands and arms. They are soft despite harsh training and experiences that would cause the hands of others to become calloused and rough. His legs are also small, but shapely and smooth as the finest silks imaginable. He has the body of a preteen girl.

Though it may look it he doesn't wear makeup. His complexion is just that beautiful. He does however frequently apply purple lip gloss. This brings attention away from his eyes to his lips which are equally nice looking. Of course, the attention is only held for as long as he moves them.

Shuuryou has what some would call "big hair". People generally take note of it after the fact, due to his face looking as aesthetically pleasing as it does. His coiffure is well cared for and fragrant. It's naturally thick and full of volume. It's a light purple in color, and almost appears white in certain lighting. He typically wears it loose, allowing it to do what it does best and defy the gravity that pulls down on thinner hair types. He typically keeps either a deep dark purple flower or hair pin in it. He's on more than one occasion worn it braided or fastened with various styles of beads.

Style/Clothing: The clothing he wears is as androgynous as his face and mannerisms. He would by no means consider himself to be a 'fashionista' but onlookers would say he's a unique dresser. Some may even say he's dressed to the nines. He takes no issue with wearing pants or skirts. He has no problem wearing baggy clothes or short shorts.

Mushami typically wears a button up shirt which matches the color of his hair. He pairs this with a darker purple bottom. If it's a dark purple miniskirt he wears knee high socks of a lighter color and purple and white suede heels. If he pairs them with slacks then he doesn't bother wearing socks. He'll just stick with purple and white suede dress shoes.

He does have several kimono which belonged to his mother. He originally kept them as keepsakes, however, once he grew the right size, he began wearing them himself. These typically aren't purple, but are red, orange, or some other warm color. They typically have stitched depictions of her favorite plants in her garden on the back. He pays homage to her by wearing pairing them with her simple gold head pieces or rings.


Tattoo's/Scars/Etc: He does have a burn scar on his back where a piece of burning plywood landed. However the scar is barely even noticeable to the keenest eye. It only stands out to him because of what the scar means to him. The scar is actually just as smooth and soft as the rest of his body.

Personality:
He's feminine not just in appearance, but also in the way that he acts. He's by no means flamboyant, but he does enjoy things that others may see as feminine. He's not one concerned with gender roles or bias. He embraces both the masculine and feminine aspects of himself. It's clear that he embraces the feminine more than the masculine though.

In fact, when he's confused for female he takes no offense to it. He doesn't even take offense to it when he's called a girl in an attempt to get a rise out of him. He finds it hard to take people who impose gender roles seriously. He finds them to be awfully simple minded. After all, why would they build themselves or their perceptions of others around inconsequential rules made by people they don’t know for reasons that are equally mystifying?

He takes great care of his skin, loves the spa, felines, and cute guys. He typically has a slight smile planted on his face to mask the worrisome thoughts typically plaguing his mind. Of course a cute guy is usually enough to distract him from those thoughts. He doesn't mind looking at cute guys, but even if one tries, he won't so much as kiss him without getting know him and developing some level of affection for him. He has integrity when it comes to his love life.

Shuuryou comes off as snobbish and conceded to those that don't know him and judge him at first glance. He seems snobbish only due to the fact that he is attractive and stand offish. Those who assume he's conceded are wrong however. He knows that he is not the greatest and is happy about it. However he can't help but be confident in his own abilities especially when surrounded by so many that can't really compare in terms of his skill. He only thinks less of those who are clearly not on his skill level but lower him by assuming they are his equal.

When it becomes obvious that a challenger is less skilled but they continue to push their luck, he has no problem turning his back to them in an attempt to bait them into being humiliated. When it comes to his temperament outside of battle, life has molded him into somewhat of a pessimist. He knows to expect the worst. That being said he still hopes for the best.

He is both cunning and sarcastic. In truth he's likeable once one gets to know him. He has a sense of humor which he often brings to the battlefield. This is of course, only if he deems it appropriate or beneficial.

(For Likes, Dislikes, Ambitions, etc, go for 1-3 sentences per point, more if you wish.)

Likes:

• An intense battle, preferably one of strategy. Though he considers all battles strategy based, ones where he faces off against an opponent with intellect that matches his own is a treat.
• Attractive men. A man who is truly attractive physically makes his heart race.
• Kittens (especially Russian Blues), foxes, and other cute little furry animals
• Good food. He finds comfort in good food and eats like someone many times his size.
• Kimonos made by hand and with care are his favorite clothing.
• Nice and kind people. They remind him of his mother.


Dislikes:
• Fighters who are clearly not on his level, yet have the audacity to request he fight them with either shikai or his full ability. More often than not, he has something special in store for these individuals. It's called humiliation.
• Those without a talent for fighting, despite training countless days and nights to attempt to become good.
• He believes that everyone has a talent. Therefor if someone is wasting their time trying to become a good combatant and getting nowhere fast, they are likely neglecting something else they may have talent with.
• Oblivious people who aren't aware of the problems of the world.
• Spiders. They creep him out. Any arachnid, any hairy bug, anything that stings. They're all not to be trusted.

Ambitions/Dreams/Goals:
• To meet an adversary that pushes him to his limits and beyond. He dreams of meeting one with greater skill and either beating.
• Defeat Amatsu Kitune. Win every battle, solve every riddle, conquer every challenge.
• To find a husband his mother would have approved of.


Strengths:
• The bow staff. He was unbelievably talented with a staff. He was surprised to find that his shikai didn't take on the form of one.
• Simultaneous task mastery allows him to use swordsmanship while focusing on kido or another task at the same time making him a truly troublesome foe even when not fighting with his full power.
• His ability to study an opponent all while fighting.
• His small size..
• Innovation, ingenuity and creativity. While at the academy many instructors believed him to be one of the most innovative fighters in all of Seireitei.
• Strategic fighter. The battle starts before blades are drawn. It starts at first glance


Fears & Weaknesses:
• Forgetting his mother's face.
• Failing to discover the truth behind his mother’s death.
• Never mastering his zanpakuto is a fear.
• Dying without ever finding THE one
• His shikai’s shape. He believed his twin ring blades impractical for use in battle when he first discovered them. Given his preference for the bow staff and really any other weapon, his shikai is something he’s only just started to learn to use.









Battle Specs






List of 'Known' Skills:

• Shunpo
• Basic Reiatsu Detection
• *If more need to be added let a Mod/Admin know*


Fighting Style:

He uses his small limber frame to his advantage to find openings and defend in ways hardly ever thought of. He often sets up for further defense after dodging so that he may land a fatal blow without interruption or interference from an opponent’s own defenses. It is not unheard of for Mushami to purposely make contact with an enemy’s weapon. For example, planting himself atop the broad side of an enemy’s over-sized weapon mid movement assures that he can not only avoid being struck by its edge, but also increases the chances that he can land a direct blow before his opponent can retract and prepare to counter. His blows are quick and precise.

Even the individual attacks which he contrived may seem scattered but every strike and swing is made with a broader goal in mind. He’s flexible, and agile. Far more fearsome in combat than one would think just by looking at him. Whether fighting one or multiple opponents, he maintains his composure and plans accordingly, even while in action.

Within the first second of battle alone, it becomes obvious that he excels in close range combat. The biggest mistake an enemy could make is thinking that they would instantly gain the advantage if they distance themselves. Mushami will make it extremely difficult to hit him from a distance, not just from dodging, but by using sword technique to thwart projectiles as well. This is of course only if an opponent is quick enough to get away. If not, he will quickly close the gap before an opponent can gain any amount of distance needed for long ranged attacks like cero or kido.

Graceful, elegant, fluid. Flashy, yet efficient, precise, yet quick. These words all describe his style. Other than that, his intricate techniques clearly define him as a fighter. He's simply cut throat. He typically begins a battle without use of a released zanpakuto. Mushami instead test an opponent to see if they are worthy of Kai Amatsu Kitsune's time and energies.

Mushami enjoys friendly spars and views them as little more than friendly, yet competitive, games of whit. He may not go all out in such a spar in terms of power expression, but his use of techniques are just as clever as they would be were he in a life or death battle.

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on Tue May 27, 2014 11:47 am


Personal Abilities:

Name: Reverse Pesquisa
Effect: An ability that can't be taught no matter how many times he attempts. Years spent in the harsh conditions of Hueco Mundo at such a young age and constantly being exposed to creatures that tracked him intent on devouring him have yielded this sensitivity. It's more of an extremely powerful intuition. This ability allows him to instantly learn the location of someone using a tracking ability. Even if it's not being used to locate him personally, if he's in the field covered by the tracking spell of ability, he picks up on it. This ability was first his reaction to a Hollow or Arrancar's pesquisa, but it also includes a Shinigami's kido, or other tracking methods.

General Techniques:


Technique Name: Utsebi (Snake)
Technique Description: For an instant, his blade appears as though it broke because an attack may appear to have gone through it before suddenly being stopped by the blade again. It may also appear as a flicker during which time it vanishes. In truth it was an attempt to ‘flash stab’ through defenses using an enemy’s blind spot using the same principle behind flash stepping but combining it with a sly nimble set of fingers. The attack it so fast, that even if it completely impales or cuts through an opponent, there is no surface mark; at least if they survive. The only evidence of the attack’s success is a single drop of blood on the blade’s edge. The following effect chart is only relevant if Mushami's speed is at least minimally greater. Mushami's zanpakuto and his opponent's must be touching for this to be used. It leaves a necessary opening in their defenses which he quickly takes advantage of.

Technique Effect Chart:

*The effect chart is for damage, durability, or any other after effect of a technique. The damage/effect/etc will be based off of tiers.*

Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower:Skin is broken, muscle pierced, bone shattered and finally organ pierced. This fight is likely over depending on the organ hit.
Opponent is One Tier Lower: Skin is broken, muscle pierced, bone shattered. Organ may be pierced depending on the speed difference.
Opponent is Equal Tier: Skin is broken, muscle is pierced and bone is shattered.
Opponent is One Tier Higher: Skin is broken and muscle is pierced.
Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher: Skin is broken. There may or may not be blood depending on the defenses of the target.






Shinigami's Partner






Zanpakuto Name: Itsumademo Kouhi (Forever Queen) Tsuneni Kingu (Always King)

Zanpakuto Element: Infinity. Each zanpakuto represents a different take on infinity. One based on the idea that something which goes on forever despite passing time is infinite. The other based on the idea that something which must always occur is infinite.

Sealed Weapon Appearance:This looks like the standard katana. That is to say it's a curved, slender, single-edged blade with a circular guard above the handle. It has a long grip so that it may be gripped comfortably and firmly. It has a piece of long purple silk braided around the guard. Its handle is glossy blood red, it's sheath is the same color. He keeps it fastened horizontally at the base of his back above the buttocks. On Shuuryou’s frame it appears much larger given the proportional difference.

Spirit Appearance: There are two spirits which inhabit this zanpakuto.

Her other half would prefer she be introduced first. Forever Queen is a beautiful female whose effortless regal qualities and physical appearance bring the word 'goddess' to mind. With a body adorned in gold and silks which cast reflected lights from her surroundings onto her flawless unreal skin, she gently glides through air with unimaginable refinement.



The spirit Shuuryou first met was that of Always King. Even though he is also adorned in gold and silks, his well defined musculature can not be hidden. He is the opposite of the seemingly gentle Forever Queen. Every move he makes sends ripples of raw power from his body. His chiseled bone structure and powerful body are truly god like in appearance.

Spirit Personality:Always King and Forever Queen are in love although they have never met. They rely on Shuuryou to pass messages along to one another. They are both often cryptic as opposed to direct and they both often leave Shuuryou with metaphors or riddles which may prove very helpful when used as a lens in everyday life.

Inner World: There are infinite worlds which are possibly viewed. Only the one which is experienced when communicating with Always King remains the same, and that is only because there is nothing. There is endless white space as far as the eye can see and beyond. When communicating with Forever Queen however, the scene is always different. Shuuryou may appear in a forest, a city, a barren wasteland, or even a combination of various landscapes.

Shikai Release Phrase:Everything comes full circle, Tsuneni Kingu. That which drives all things is perpetual, Itsumademo Kouhi.
Shikai Appearance: The zanpakuto transform into two large circles whose diameter is equal to Shuuryou's height. Long curved, continuous blades envelope the outer edges of each of these rings. Each also has nine dagger like protrusions in three groups of three spaced an equal distance across from each other. One ring is obsidian and gold in color while the other is obsidian in color.

Shikai Abilities:

(Shinigami may start with ONE shikai ability; you may have two shikai abilities only if you can get the tier of 3-3 or stronger. If you have two anyway and fail to get that tier, you will simply have to lock one of the abilities so you can't use them until you hit the appropriate rank. Shikai abilities are only usable in Shikai - they do not apply in bankai or your sealed form.)



Name: Forever
Effect: An ability held only by the golden circle blade.
This causes a sword strike to span on into forever. A simple cut on a surface which begins as something barely superficial will grow and deepen until the cut completely makes its way through what was in its path. For example, if the skin on an arm is cut, even after the blade is removed the cut grows. It may only break the epidermis but it will eventually cut through the dermis, the subcutis, veins, arteries, muscle, tendon, and bone before eventually cutting through those same layers in reverse, on the opposite side of the body part that was struck. This cut spans on into forever, or so long as Forever is present. This takes separate post to cut through various layers comprising a target. When it comes to the living, it must first cut through spiritual pressure. For opponents of lesser tiers this happens almost instantly. The ability then cuts through skin, muscle, bone in that order before traveling through the same layers on the side opposite the cut. It takes one post to cut through each layer. For opponents of higher tiers however, the spiritual pressure they possess is denser and therefor takes longer to cut through. Opponents a single tier higher have spiritual pressure which takes one post to cut through. A target two tiers higher has spiritual pressure which takes two posts to cut through(and so on, each tier higher adds an additional post). Specialties like Hierro add an additional post. The cutting effect continues until the circle blade is struck by someone. This breaksdisrupts the flow of Forever but doesn't reverse the damage caused. The spiritual pressure initially cut through may replenish and create a protective layer once more, but the damage to the physical body will remain unless a healing ability is present.

Name: Always
Effect: An ability held only by the obsidian circle blade.
This causes the original damage caused by this blade to recycle endlessly, or at least until the zanpakuto is sealed yet again. A blow caused by this will reapply damage over and over again. It does this by repairing what is destroyed by the first blow. It may seem like a useless ability in terms of battle applicability, however it's perfect for use against those with well developed healing factors. Due to the fact that the ability and the cut are dealt at the same time, it repairs damage it causes before a target's healing factor has a chance to act. What it doesn't do is replace blood which is lost as a result of being cut being that blood loss is the result of the act but blood loss isn't the act itself. Unlike the ability of Forever, this ability relies purely on the strength of Shuuryou. Like Forever, this ability may work on inanimate objects, however whether its useless or not depends on the context. For example a strike against another opponent's zanpakuto may not break it, but the repeated sword clashing sound which results from the strike being recycled over and over again may become annoying. It would be more useful if Shuuryou were attempting to slash through a self repairing barrier because the initial slash may create a repeated opening. The effect happens in one post, then undoes itself in the next post, before applying itself yet again.

Shikai Techniques:




Kidou





Spell Name: Seki
Spell Type: Bakudo
Spell Number: 8
Spell Incantation: None
Spell Effect: Creates a round shield that seems to temporarily paralyze and repel whatever strikes it.

Spell Name: Horin
Spell Type: Bakudo
Spell Number: 9
Spell Incantation: Way of Binding #9: Disintegration Circle
Spell Effect: Causes an orange hued tendril with spiraling yellow patterns to erupt from the users hand and attempt to trap a target. The Kidō is able to connect with another one of itself if both have captured a target and bind them together.

Spell Name: Sekienton
Spell Type: Bakudo
Spell Number: #21
Spell Incantation: None
Spell Effect: Creates a blast upon activation and is used like a ninja's smoke bomb.

Spell Name: Kyokko
Spell Type: Bakudo
Spell Number: 26
Spell Incantation: None
Spell Effect: Hides the target from sight, by bending light. The spell has the ability to totally hide the presence and reiatsu of the user or specified object.

Spell Name: Shitotsu Sansen
Spell Type: Bakudo
Spell Number: 30
Spell Incantation: None
Spell Effect: After forming a golden triangle with one's finger, it shoots three beams of sharpened light from each corner. These act to pin opponents to a surface.

Spell Name: Tsuriboshi
Spell Type: Bakudo
Spell Number: 37
Spell Incantation: None
Spell Effect: Creates a star-shaped cushion of Spiritual Energy, which connects it to nearby objects with. It can stop falling objects, acting like a safety net.

Spell Name: Kakushitsujiaku
Spell Type: Bakudo
Spell Number: 58
Spell Incantation: Heart of the South. Eye of the North. Fingertip of the West. Heel of the East. Carry the wind and gather. Banish the rain and disband. Way of binding no. 58 Kakushitsujiaku!
Spell Effect: This technique allows the user to focus in and instantly locate spiritual force of a user even if they are attempting to hide it.

Spell Name: Hyapporankan
Spell Type: Bakudo
Spell Number: 62
Spell Incantation: Descend from heaven. Impale the serpent.
Spell Effect: A rod formed of condensed energy is formed in the spell caster's hand. When thrown towards the target it instantly multiplies in number and covers a wide area. When they touch an opponent's body they enter the body and disrupts the body part's ability to move rendering them immobile.

Spell Name: Sajo Sabaku
Spell Type: Bakudo
Spell Number: 63
Spell Incantation: None
Spell Effect: A long thick chain comprised of condensed kido shoots from the fingertip of the caster. It flies through the air in correspondence with the caster's fingertips. It's a stronger and longer lasting version of bakudo no. 4.


Spell Name: Tozansho
Spell Type: Bakudo
Spell Number: 73
Spell Incantation: None
Spell Effect: Creates an inverted pyramid-shaped barrier around the caster.

Spell Name: Tenteikura
Spell Type: Bakudo
Spell Number: 77
Spell Incantation: None
Spell Effect: Transmits messages mentally to anyone within an area of the caster's choosing.

Spell Name: Danko
Spell Type: Bakudo
Spell Number: 81
Spell Incantation: None
Spell Effect: Creates an energy barrier in the form of a rectangular wall. According to Byakuya, it is capable of stopping destructive spells up to #89.

Spell Name: Sho
Spell Type: Hadou
Spell Number: 1
Spell Incantation: None
Spell Effect: Pushes the target away from the caster.

Spell Name: Byakurai
Spell Type: Hadou
Spell Number: 4
Spell Incantation: None
Spell Effect: The user fires a concentrated, powerful lightning bolt from their finger.

Spell Name: Tsuzuri Raiden
Spell Type: Hadou
Spell Number: 11
Spell Incantation: None
Spell Effect: Electric current flows through any object the user touches and is able to lead electricity, damaging any target that is in contact with the object the current runs through.

Spell Name: Fushibi
Spell Type: Hadou
Spell Number: 12
Spell Incantation: Number 12 Concealing Fire.
Spell Effect: Creates a kido net which is both invisible and intangible until a potential target comes into its territory and touches it. The caster is made aware of their presence and then has the option of detonating it.

Spell Name: Shakkaho
Spell Type: Hadou
Spell Number: 31
Spell Incantation: Ye Lord, mask of blood and flesh all creation, flutter of wings. Ye who bares the name of man, inferno and pandemonium. The sea barrier surges, march on to the south! Way of destruction number 31 Hadou! Red flame cannon!
Spell Effect: Fires a ball of red energy at a target.

Spell Name: Tenran
Spell Type: Hadou
Spell Number:58
Spell Incantation: Way of destruction number 58, Orchid of Destruction!
Spell Effect: Summons supernaturally strong gale force winds capable of tossing about even powerful Arrancar who specialize in aerobatic combat.

Spell Name: Sentan Hakuja
Spell Type: N/A
Spell Number:
Spell Incantation: None
Spell Effect: Sections of the caster's clothing appear to extend and dance around them as if trapped by whirlwind. This is actually space around the user being distorted and bent. The user is then teleported away from their current location in a burst of light.

Spell Name: Keikaigi
Spell Type: N/A
Spell Number:
Spell Incantation: My right hand is the stone that bridges worlds. My left hand is the blade that binds reality. The black haired shepherd is hung from a chair. Stratus clouds come, and I strike down the ibis!
Spell Effect: A forbidden kido that opens a tare between dimensions for access into the black cavity.


Specialty: Strategy, Combat and Kido






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History: Hailing from a place referred to by many as the eighty-first district of South Rukongai, he is the son of a once very popular geisha. While she herself was born and raised in the sixtieth, her grace and beauty quickly earned her fame after being forced to become a geisha by her own parents. She eventually became pregnant with Shuuryou. His father, a member of one of one of few royal families was forbidden to marry by his own family. Shuuryou was told by his mother that his father took his own life after falling into despair over the royal family’s harsh decision.
After his family learned of Mushami's birth they sought out to discredit and degrade his mother even further. She was forced into hiding due to harassment and threats made against her and her child. She found home in the dangerous eighty-first, on the outskirts of Rukongai. Though they struggled his mother's kindness and grace despite all was an inspiration to him. He spent the first six years of his life with her, in her loving embrace, before she was taken from him.
Their home was attacked by a Hollow. There house was burned down and Mushami would have burned down with it were it not for his mother's courageous sacrifice. Her last words to him were ones expressing her love to him. While watching the house burn down his mother screamed the name he'd never heard. He pushed it to the back of his mind and focused only on revenge. He learned that the Hollow that killed his mother had escaped to a place called Hueco Mundo before the Gotei 13 could dispatch Shinigami to deal with it. Fueled by his anger and his mother's loving memory, he sought out to become a Shinigami.
At first he was denied entry on account of his young age. However, he was determined. He took on a job cleaning at the academy while spying on students during fencing and demon magic training sessions. He mastered several basic kido within weeks. It was during his own secret kido training that he was discovered. He mastered a kido that no other first year students had mastered and was given one final test. It was during that test that he proved his skill with fencing was nearly as impressive as his kido ability.
Mushami is the youngest student to ever be allowed to enter the Shinigami Academy. A year and a half after being accepted he completed all requirements needed to move on and become an actual Shinigami.
After graduating he immediately sought out the Hollow that killed his mother. He learned forbidden kido from a high ranking instructor when that instructor failed to get his mind off of vengeance. He taught Mushami the way to get to the realm where Hollows walk freely in hopes that Mushami would die. He believed that Mushami's thirst for vengeance would get whatever team he would come to one day lead killed.
Mushami eventually made it to Hueco Mundo and tracked the Hollow's reiatsu signature.
He spent ten years in the savage wasteland, slaying any Hollow he was strong enough to. This is his story.

10 Years Ago

“Shuuryou Mushami, you must focus on both the form of the kido as well as the desired outcome.” Instructor Ruki said calmly as the two sat, legs folded, in a meditative state. Yet another day of private kido training had come. What Shuuryou was learning was illegal due to the level of danger presented if failure should occur. It was because of this that the two sat in a secret place, scarcely lit beneath the grounds of Shino Academy. As if that wasn’t enough, Instructor Ruki had also created multilayered barriers which shielded the outside from what the two of them were doing. Shuuryou sat, free of distraction, mind focused only on the final form of his kido and the location he wished for it to deliver him. The brilliant sapphire glow of Keikaigi shot from his hand upwards before stopping several feet above his head. “My right hand is the stone that bridges worlds.” Shuuryou said, slowly, calmly. As he spoke the light above his head dimmed. The beginnings of what he desired had begun to form. The space of what was referred to as ‘The Black Cavity’ would soon be his to roam. “My left hand is the blade that binds reality. The black haired shepherd is hung from a chair. Stratus clouds come, and I strike down the ibis!”
Upon finishing the last syllable the divide between dimensions completely opened. Wild winds burst from it. Not even they were able to pull Shuuryou from his meditative state. The kido was complete, but its stability depended on his own.

“Mushami, Shuuryou.” Instructor Ruki said, standing. He made his way over to his student and rest his hand upon his shoulder. “You have sufficient understanding of this kido.” He said. Was all Shuuryou needed to hear. He opened his eyes, and in doing so closed the black cavity overhead. With a snap of his fingers Instructor Ruki disbursed the barriers he’d created. A wave of fresh, damp air flooded the area. “You are ready for your journey to land of Hollow-kind.” He finished, turning his back to Shuuryou, leaving the young man to his own thoughts.

Shuuryou had indeed learned all that he needed, or at least all that Instructor Ruki wanted to teach him. It was clear to Shuuryou that the man just wanted to get rid of him. He didn’t once inquire about how close he was to achieving shikai, or other hadou which would be useful in fighting off Hollows. Nor did he make certain that his student could perform what he was taught under less than desirable circumstances. He only gave Shuuryou the bare minimum needed to survive in the unfamiliar dangerous landscape. There was something else that his instructor said to him after a training exercise involving a real Hollow. “You will eventually become a leader, a leader who poses a bigger threat to his own than any Hollow could ever.”

The young man however would make due with what Instructor Ruki had given him. He would adapt in Hueco Mundo. He had to. For the sake of vengeance, he would conquer any obstacles that the deadly land had to throw at him. Nothing would stop him from avenging his mother’s death by finding the Hollow that had escaped there.

Present Day-Exams Portion 1, Written

Gotei 13 protocol, rules, and regulations. As Shuuryou sat and answered questions regarding these facets of Gotei 13 life, he wondered just how many or these protocols would serve in a setting like Hueco Mundo. That purely savage land, free of all rules but one; the strong will survive. Would such rules and regulations really give structure? Or would they instead act as a hinderance?

Question No. 67
True or False
“Third seats may only give orders in place of the second seat in the event that the second seat has died and didn’t leave orders which were to be carried out after the death of the second seat.”

This was true, on paper. However, what if the lieutenant was killed and gave orders prior to their death which would lead to even more sacrifice? These rules would absolutely act as a hindrance. However, his passing depended on giving official answers, even if he knew better.

Question No. 93
“Gotei 13 protocols dealing with Hollow eradication are built around the idea that it’s best to slay a Hollow first, and ask questions later. Why?”
The answer they want to see written revolved around necessary precaution being some Hollows have unusual powers and abilities which are often unknown and that all Hollows are dangerous. This was only partially true. Shuuryou knew otherwise. As he wrote the official answer on the lines provided, he thought back to his arrival in Hueco Mundo.

10 Years Ago
Shuuryou was captivated by the dark and mysterious allure of this white desert. It’s white sands sparkled in complete contrast to the matte black sky when met by moonlight. It were almost as if he were walking through a charcoal drawing of an arid landscape. The black cavity he’d created closed behind him. The brief upflow of air created from the resulting change in atmospheric pressure pulled him from his state of wonder. In that moment the landscape lost its aesthetic appeal. The eight year old boy remembered just what it was he came to this place to do.

A loud squeal drew his attention. “Was that a Hollow?” He thought, drawing his zanpakuto. He’d never heard one make such a sound. It sounded like something a small injured animal would produce. He followed it. The coarse sand slipped into his wooden sandals making walking a bit of a challenge. The sound originated from just over the sand dune nearest his location. He hid just behind its peak so that he could learn just what was making the noise without giving away his position.

“Please...help…” He thought his eyes were lying to him. There was no the creature that lay before him could exist in a world as dangerous as Hueco Mundo was said to be. It was an injured Hollow. It’s appearance was that of a small bear cub. It had to have been some kind of illusion, one made by a much more fearsome Hollow, one designed to make it easier for that Hollow to catch their prey off guard. “Please, ma, where are you, please help.” It sat in a shallow puddle of blood, it’s own blood. One of its hind legs was missing.

Shuuryou stood, and approached the small creature. The moment the Hollow cub laid eyes on Shuuryou it opens its little jaws. A familiar red light grew from his mouth. It was preparing for a cero. Shuuryou instantly drew his zanpakuto. To both of their surprize, the ruby colored light faded. The little Hollow was far too weak to mount an attack. “Please...no!” The cub pleaded. Shuuryou stood complacent. Was this truly a Hollow? How did such a creature even come into being here, in this place? “MA, HELP!” The fur covered creature continued. As it called out to its mother, frightened and afraid, Shuuryou was brought back to memories of his own mother and her death at the hands of a Hollow. He shut his eyes as he became overwhelmed with both sadness and rage. Strangely he saw himself in the little defenseless creature. He was weak back then, and unable to save the only person he’d ever loved and ever felt safe with. It was a state of being he never wished to go back to.

Upon opening his eyes, he found himself standing in complete silence. The desert was quiet. The young boy found his zanpakuto deeply lodged within the mask of the crying Hollow. “Ma…” It muttered. Its mask and flesh surrounding the stab wound went up in a cloud of dense black smoke. It danced around the weapon that caused its being before vanishing. The cub's entire body mimicked this before Shuuryou’s zanpakuto fell to the ground.

Present Day- Exams Portion Two, Oral (Strategy)

The written examination was finished well within time limits. Here, now, Shuuryou, in preparation for his oral examination. The proctors didn’t keep him waiting for long. After the sliding doors opened, Instructor Ruki was the first to enter. He was followed by two more men who Shuuryou didn’t recognize. Their demeanor showed them to be instructors as well. Both of the men who proceeded Instructor Ruki turned their noses up at him. Who was this soul, this boy, to dare go against tradition? Did he really believe that he could do in a year what generally required seven?

They sat down at the single table in the room and began organizing the papers they carried with them. The two whispered to one another. “This child is no prodigy.” One said to the other. “I agree. I’ve seen two in my day and he doesn’t favor either.” Their chatter was cut short when Instructor Ruki began to clear his throat. I gestured for Shuuryou to join them and sit on the opposite side of the table. As Shuuryou approached, his former instructor’s cold hard gaze remained fixed on the violet eyes approaching. It was obvious that the man wasn’t happy to see Shuuryou return. He’d really hoped that the boy died in Hueco Mundo. Shuuryou sat, legs folded.

“Often in the field of battle...” Instructor Ruki said, eyes still fixed on Shuuryou. The other proctors looked down at their papers and followed along with their eyes. “...a person or group may find themselves overpowered by an opponent. Other than running away, how can one respond?”

“Other than running away.” Shuuryou thought to himself. The Gotei 13 apparently held such frigid beliefs when it came to combat. They must to have instructors install the notion that retreat wasn’t an option in the minds of Shinigami in training. He knew better. Survival was key. Living to fight another day, in a stronger state than you were before is the real key to victory. However, as he did in the written portion of the exams, he replied in the way they were looking for.

“I turn to history for the answer.” Shuuryou responded, without the slightest bit of hesitation. He was hardly intimidated by his proctor’s gaze. He’d seen much worse after all. “During the Quincy feud Shinigami were often outnumbered and faced superior strength. Shikai wasn’t as common as it is now and all but a few had achieved bankai. Quincy on the other hand came into their abilities much easier and in greater number. During the legendary battle between Death God Matsumo and Quincy General Hikaru Michiki this all stood true.” His timely and eloquent response clearly impressed his two critiques as their eyes darted up from their papers with a surprising new interest in purple haired young boy.

“Death God Matsumo had less fighters, intelligence on them somehow found its way into the hands of his enemies, and he was one of only three shikai users.” Shuuryou inhaled. He breathed deeply and gathered his thoughts. He couldn’t afford to let any of his actual beliefs spill into this room. He would surely be failed and declared unworthy despite surviving in the savage Hollow land for a longer time than most experienced veterans could manage. He continued.

“Death God Matsumo was attacked by a wave of Quincy, but it wasn’t unexpected. After all, they had intell on his forces and would mark an easy victory for Quincy General Hikaru Michiki. She wasted no time in sending her troops. In doing so she ignored important details gathered by their informants. The most important was that there were a few Shinigami that were said to be among the group they encountered which possessed shikai and several more who were proficient with kido. Her troops didn’t check to make sure that those mentioned were among those attacked. While Quincy frontlines were busy with basic Death Gods, the truly dangerous among them slipped into the Quincy General’s camp. She was destroyed in mere minutes. The empowered Shinigami then moved in and attacked the frontlines from behind. The Quincy General’s frontline was caught in a pincer formation. Death gods who weren’t so powerful yet willing to lay down their lives for a cause on one side, and masters of both shikai and kido on the other. If strength isn’t on your side, strategy may be all you need.”

Instructor Ruki was the only one who was not obviously impressed. He knew well that this exam was a joke based entirely on formality. Formalities would not stop someone who fought through what Shuuryou did and lived to tell about it. Still there was the slightest bit of hope within his former teacher. The hope that he would tell of his own experiences. Though he didn’t hear them all, he knew the dangers that lay in wait for the weak in Hueco Mundo and because Shuuryou was weak when he first travelled there, he had to have faced at least one Hollow whose power was too great for strategy. He must have faced at least one Hollow that he was forced to run and hide from like a cowardice rat.

10 Years Ago

What remained of the little Hollow cub’s body disbursed. A dark insect with silken black and purple wings came into being in its place. It wasn’t until it had flown off and out of sight that Shuuryou had begun to pay the consequence for what he’d done. After sheathing his zanpakuto he was immediately frozen, unable to move. What had come over him? Though he didn’t change his location, he now, somehow found himself standing in the presence of a tremendous insidious reiatsu. He turned to find yet another Hollow standing in the distance watching him. A massive wave of sand washed over him and sent him hurling through the air. He originally thought that newcomer held power over earth and sand. The proceeding roar let him know otherwise. The creature hadn’t attacked him, that was simply a roar which emanated from it.

He regained his footing midair by molding a layer of reiatsu beneath his feat and then shielding himself from the shockwave with a barrier. “Bakudo number 73, Tozansho!”. He stood feet planted firmly in the stable air inside of his pyramid shaped barrier. Still, the power of its roar could be faintly felt. He’d read of the powerful highly evolved Hollows which were encountered in Hueco Mundo in ancient times. Some were called Ajuchas and others Vasto Lordes. Was this one of them? The powerful being stood where the cub had been slain, sniffing, digging, searching for any of its remains. “Disgusting...” Shuuryou thought. “It’s hoping to devour what was left over.”

“Baba?” The creature growled. The young warrior was wrong. It clearly knew the Hollow cub. “Baba where are you?” It growled again. “Baba, Baba, Baba?” Each time, its power flared. The spiritual pressure it produced sent cracks throughout Shuuryou’s protective barrier. “No way…” Shuuryou thought, after noticing the cracks in his kido. This was the second most powerful kido barrier he had at his disposal, and the first would take far too much time to create. This creature could likely kill him with little effort at all. Any chance he had of coming up with a strategy to defeat it would include a barrier which it could easily break through. There was nothing he could do. All of his training and preperations would be for nought if he died here and now. There was nothing he could do at this point; almost nothing.

He sat on the artificial floor that he molded and began to chant. “WHAT HAVE YOU DONE?!” The creature roared. A shockwave similar to the first shot up from it and tore through Shuuryou’s pyramid. “Sentan Hakuja!” The boy said. Sections of his robe sprung to life and danced around his young frame. “I ASKED YOU A QUESTION!” It roared. “Its power passed through the boy above it. It was too late for it to harm him. His spell was almost complete. “GIVE HER BACK TO ME!” It said, leaping into the air, claws extended. It shred through the cloth at unbelievable speed. However, Shuuryou was no longer within them.

Present Day- Exams Portion 3, Kido Proficiency

There were hundreds of kido and only a few kido corps members were likely to know them all. This portion of the exam didn’t test the number of kido he knew, but rather his proficiency with those he did know. The strength and effectiveness of kido performed without a chant versus those performed with a completed chant. The success of kido performed in ideal conditions, versus the success of kido performed during more stressful conditions was the most important part of this portion. His time in the land of Hollow-kind more than prepared him for this test.

In fact, compared to what he’d gone through, this test as laughable. The current trial at hand involved him simply making his way from one side of a bamboo field to the other before time ran out. The tall grasses were meant to conceal straw filled dummies and traps. He’d been launched into the air by a simple spring and board trap, however this was done purposely. He needed to know just how far he was from the finish line. As he soared above the bamboo tops, barely brushing them more traps were launched. Balls of twigs, and dirt filled leather balls were launched by catapult. They clearly wanted him to make his way through the course on foot. “Hadou Number 1” He said, as the first projectile came within range. He hurled the object into the one which preceded it. The attack was enough to get him back on the ground, but he’d already gagged how much further he had to go and also where the exam proctors were.

He’d been keeping track of time in his head, and with only a few minutes left, he had more than enough time to make it. Still, to shave off time, he raised his hands and pointed them palms open, towards the finish line. He began chanting. He moved his hands in a circular fashion before finally saying “Way of destruction number 58, Orchid of Destruction!”

A powerful tunnel of whirlwind burst from his hand and shot forward. All grasses, all bamboo, all traps and dummies in its path were ripped up from the ground and tossed about before landing on either side of the newly formed dirt path. This truly was a joke compared to what he’d experienced. He had his skills with kido pushed way harder than this.
9 Years Ago

This marked his fortieth battle. A number much lower than expected, given he’d been searching Hueco Mundo for nearly a whole year. Still, the number wasn’t completely surprising considering the great lengths he’d gone through to avoid detection when necessary. While this wasn’t the first time he’d faced multiple Hollows, this group relied on the most troublesome combination attacks. A cobra Hollow which attacked while on the ground and a hawk Hollow which attacked while in the sky. It was the hawk Hollows sight which made hiding from this pair difficult. It had the ability to see through his invisibility kido.

It was the winged creature that would guide its scaly ally to Shuuryou’s general location where it’s serpent based tracking ability would do the rest of the work. Both Hollows were powerful and nimble. A year ago he’d have never stood a chance against a pair such as this, especially after not having eaten for days. Their combined power reminded him a great deal of the Hollow he was forced to run away from mid-battle almost a year ago; Mama was it? This pair was likely a pair of Adjucha.

Shuuryou couldn’t fight them both at once for much longer. The white sands at his feet were worked up into a flurry caused by the hawk overhead. It would create cover for the serpent to strike from below. This snake was definitely the more dangerous of the two. Cobra’s were afterall venomous animals. The moment he heard the hissing close by, Shuuryou took to the air zanpakuto drawn. A flash step later and Shuuryou found himself above his feathered attacker. He brought his blade edge down at its back with all of the physical strength he had in him. All he managed to do was split feathers and draw a bit of blood.

“Not good enough worm!” It screeched, gaining even more altitude. It worked itself into a spiral in an attempt to shake Shuuryou from its back. The young boy dropped his zanpakuto trying to grab hold of what he could. The bird continued its dizzying flight pattern. Had Shuuryou eaten, he’d have vomited at this point. The force from the momentum nearly caused him to lose grip. He found a renewed interest in the slash wound he’d created before. Plunging his hand into it he began chanting. “Way of destruction number 4, Byakurai!” A bright blue light shined from the wound before a similarly colored bolt of lightning shot from the bird’s mouth. The hawk began its descent, but not of its own choosing. Its wings no longer flapped. They had actually gone completely limp.

The two crashed into the colorless sands. The impact of the bird’s giant body sent a wave of the granules in all directions. It let out one final breath before the glow in its eyes faded. This one as done fighting. What of the other?

Shuuryou stood, not once letting his guard down. The cobra could strike at any moment. The youg boy could hear what sounded like a scuffle. Had the serpent found something else to attack? No. When the dust had finally settled, Shuuryou could see the cobra clearly. His zanpakuto, which he dropped just moments before hand had found home in one of its eyes. Perhaps it was also done fighting. Shuuryou pointed a finger at the beast. A blue glow, just like before, shined from his fingertip. This didn’t go unnoticed by the wounded Hollow who noticed both its former prey and ally. “No...what have you done brat?!” It said, quickly burrowing beneath the sands, blade still deeply embedded within its eye socket. Shuuryou’s lightning missed by several feet.

The fight had taken a lot out of him. He didn't have the strength to give chase and reclaim his zanpakuto. He was both tired and low on reiatsu. Not to mention the hunger he felt was a sign of something far more threatening; starvation. He’d made several trips from Hueco Mundo to Soul Society for food and water over the past year. However, each time that he did he was nearly captured by members of the Gotei 13’s research and development team. He also found himself in a new location than the one he left upon return. This would make searching Hueco Mundo near impossible. So he decided to go longer periods of time without making trips in hopes that he could search a greater portion of an area before arriving someplace else he’d never been. Had he waited too long and tried to do too much? He was too hungry, and too tired to make the trip back again.

He turned his attention back to the hawk Hollow carcass. Was eating Hollow flesh anything like eating the flesh of a normal animal?

Present Day- Exams Portion 4, Unarmed Combat


The man who was once his most adamant teacher, the man that hoped he’d died sat along with the other exam proctors atop mats lining the far end of the dojo wall. He looked in Shuuryou’s direction, however, rather than gazing at him, the old man seemed to gaze through him. Had he created a self fulfilling prophecy? He sent Shuuryou off to die in the savage land of Hueco Mundo in hopes that he would never have a chance to rise up Shinigami ranks and endanger the lives of his subordinates. Had all of his time spent preparing the boy for the journey assured that he’d gain the strength needed to gain power? Mushami could see it now; Instructor Yuki was indeed looking through him. He was in fact attempting to look into the boy’s past. Surely there was something he acquired that he could use against him, some type of weakness.


“Mushami, Shuuryou.” His former teacher said, disconcerned. “You’ve come up on the Unarmed Combat portion of your examination. Armed combat will follow. You opponents will be seniors that will be graduating next semester.” He gestured towards the men and women lining the adjacent walls. There displeased and angry faces spoke volumes. “Needless to say, they aren’t too keen on a first year student, and former dropout at that, surpassing them. They’ve nominated representatives that you will have to defeat if you hope to meet and pass guidelines required for this special final exam.” Heavy footsteps approached from behind and grew ever closer. The first fighter they nominated was huge by the sound of it.


It wasn’t until Shuuryou turned to perform a mutual bow that he saw just how big he was. He outweighed the young boy by a minimum of fifty pounds and the difference wasn’t fat or water weight. His opponent was both tall and muscular. His scarred callused hands and feet said all that needed to be said about him. He worked hard to become a master of his craft. Further still his mastery was more than just physical. This man was developed a proper fighting mind to match his physical ability. He looked into Shuuryou’s eyes without judgement or overconfidence either of which would otherwise lead to his immediate defeat.


There wasn’t an ounce of fear to be found in Shuuryou’s small frame despite the difference. It wasn’t a matter of having faced several Hollow without use of a weapon and while too low on reiatsu to rely on kido. Something primal, perhaps an unexplainable sense picked up from Hueco Mundo, was deep inside of his being. This institution was unnatural and it sheltered those it trained from what it sought to train them to destroy. In the real world, where Hollows roam without fear or even knowledge of what a Shinigami is, it’s survival of the fittest and Shuuryou did just that.


“Begin!” Instructor Ruki said loudly. Little time passed between the last syllable and the first attack against Shuuryou. A quick punch blew past Shuuryou’s face. The rough skin of his opponent’s hand harmlessly brushed his cheek after the young boy adjusted the angle of his head to avoid the intended blow. That wasn’t the only adjustment made. The moment his opponent realized his fist would miss its target he opened his hand and allowed Shuuryou’s purple coiffer to meet it. He gripped what hair he could tightly and pulled down on it. This time he intended for Shuuryou’s head to meet his knee.


In an unexpected display of speed the young boy brought his hands down on the ascending knee. This wasn’t done to stop the blow, but instead to use his opponent’s own leg as leverage. Sure enough, when his knee was at the highest point Shuuryou was able to bring his own legs upwards and wrap them around his opponent’s neck. It only took a little pressure to cause the giant to release his hold on his little opponent’s violet hair. He instead reached for the legs now restricting the flow of blood to the head.


Second passed before the large fighter fell to a single knee. After a few seconds more Shuuryou was able to use his leg hold on him to force the giant on his side. The fight was over the moment his muscle bound foe passed from consciousness.


Perhaps Instructor Ruki was right. This was actually the first time Shuuryou had beaten a Shino student of this skill level. His skill in unarmed combat was gained in a land where this style of fighting is a way of life. Those who didn’t excel simply perished.

8 Years Ago
A final burst of fluorescent light lit up the landscape after he used hyapporankan to crack open a hollow’s mask. The Hollow collapsed as the red light in its eyes dimmed. The bony structure collapsed in on itself as Shuuryou pulled back the condensed energy rod and spun it in hand. A bolt of electricity arched from the freshly cracked mask toward the rod. Only then did he turn to throw it at his next attacker. The already trunkless mammoth collapsed after hyapporankan split into two separate rods each embedding themselves within a front leg. He had used two kido casts at different times to change the effect of a single kido, not only turning it from one that restrained to one that destroyed, but also using the restraining element to increase the destructive property of the second kido.

Repurposing kido in this way was just one of the ways he managed to survive in this endless night without his zanpakuto. He learned long ago that unarmed fighting was near useless against those with natural armor plating, claws, or a size so great that simple punches made little impact. As he walked towards the floored mammoth he began chanting. He stopped soon after spotting a brief glimmer within his immediate vicinity. A lustrous object caught the moonlight on its surface at just the right moment, but what was it? He hadn’t seen metal or crystal since arriving. After taking but a few paces towards the object, he found himself reunited with the zanpakuto he lost more than a year ago. “No way?” He said, plucking it from the sand. The last he saw it, he’d embedded it within the eye of a serpent like Hollow who escaped, taking it with it. Did it manage to shake it loose? “No. It’s more likely that the serpent was defeated and eaten. The Hollow the beat it didn’t know what to do with this so it-” It was then that Shuuryou noted a distinct reiatsu signature he’d only sensed once before. It belonged to the powerful creature that attacked him when he first arrived, the one that forced him to retreat. He could sense what remained of the Hollow’s reiatsu fixed to his zanpakuto.

“It must have held my sword for quite some time for it to leave such a lasting effect. Is it tracking me?” He asked, placing the sword in the sheath which he’d kept despite it being useless for the most part. He knelt, placing both palms on the ground in preparations to track the creature he thought of. “This uneasy feeling I’ve had for so long. I thought that it was just from my being in this wretched place, but what if it’s not? What if it was because this creature has been stalking me?” Before he could even begin chanting the ground began to tremble. The mammoth had broken free and begun to charge at him. In a flash, Shuuryou leaped from the ground and propelled himself towards the beast. He both unsheathed and sheathed his blade in one fluid movement, cutting through his attacker in between. The move wouldn’t have been possible for him just two years ago. His time spent without his zanpakuto had made him strong and more aware of his own ability.

The furry elephantine body began to dissipate. It’s flesh transformed into a dense black smoke he hadn’t seen since last slaying a Hollow with it more than a year ago. A familiar black insect with wings of dark silk formed within the smoke before beating its wings and beginning its ascent into the skies. The moment the last bits of his foe’s body went up he found himself standing in the center of an ocean of spiritual pressure. He held his breath out of necessity. If he were to attempt to breath the air would surely have been forced from his lungs. He had found the answer to his question. The creature had indeed been following him.

“So then...” The creature said, stepping from the shadows and revealing itself in all of its monstrous beauty. Shuuryou hadn’t gotten a good look at it when it attacked him before, but now that he could see it, he could see that it was human in shape with bear like claws and fur covered body. The dark raven fur gave the creature a statuesque appearance when met with moonlight. Did it always look like this? Though clad in darkness during their first meeting, Shuuryou could tell that something relating to its appearance was different.

“It looks to be true.” It continued. “You are a god of death and you send Hollows away when you kill them with your sword.” It bent over and looked Shuuryou in the eyes. It had a standard red light in its eyes which cast a soft glow on the young boy’s face. “I noticed that there’s a difference between when you kill us with your magic spell versus when you kill us with that.” It reached for his neck. Its fur covered claws began to transform themselves. They grew dull at first and then grew muscle and skin. When the transformation was complete, it had human hands.

“Stand up would you, I’m trying to talk to you.” It grabbed him by the collar of his shirt and stood up with him. The second it let go he collapsed once again. “Oh, right. I almost forgot. I learned a trick trying to follow you around.” The ocean of spiritual pressure suddenly vanished. Shuuryou could once again stand if he wished to. He questioned whether or not it was even worth it. A creature with such an insane power could easily end him.

“Where do you send the ones you strike down with your fancy sword?” It asked. “Is it true you send them to heaven? Is that where you sent my baby?” It finished, leaving Shuuryou to think. “This is why it’s been tracking me? It wants to know what I did with the smaller Hollow I slayed before…” He thought looking up at the creature.

“You should be able to stand now so why aren’t you? You thinking I’m gonna kill you aren’t you?” It said looking down at him. “Well I won’t, not depending on your answers. Now tell me what you did to my baby!” It was obvious now. It wanted to know about the whereabouts of its ally. If he could convince it that it was in a better place, then maybe it would let him live. “You're good at this. That’s right Shuryou, that’s what it wants. But is that all?” Another voice said. This one was softer, and even feminine in nature. Where was it coming from though? Was he hearing things? It hardly mattered now, not given his current predicament.

“I sent your baby to heaven.” He said rising. “This is a zanpakuto which purifies Hollows and sends them to parad-” He stopped after making eye contact. Though nothing more than glowing red lights, they shined with a concerned look. He’d begun to think of his own mother whenever she grew concerned about his where abouts and questioned where he’d been. Was this Hollow truly just a concerned mother? Perhaps in an unexpected moment of weakness, Shuuryou was honest with her.

“I sent him to Soul Society.” He continued. “Soul Society is heaven compared to this place...this place where instinct and brute strength rules. Depending on what family you are born into it may be heaven, or it may be hell.” Shuuryou began telling the motherly beast of Soul Society’s social structure and layout. He told it about the nobles and the poor. He even began telling the creature of the hell he experienced when his mother was killed by the Hollow that he had come to Hueco Mundo to hunt.

Its glowing red eyes now held a look that said it would cry if it could. “Baba...Baba went to a place like that all by his little self?!” It screamed. “No, I can’t have that.” It continued, falling to its knees. “Please, please send me there! It’s the only way that I can protect him. I can’t mess up again.” The little warrior hesitated for a moment. He held his hand loosely on his sword hilt, but couldn’t bring himself to draw it.

“That Hollow that killed your Mama…” it said, I know where it is but I’ll only tell you if-” Shuuryou instantly drew his blade, and plunged it into the creature’s abdomen. To assure that this blow would kill the beast he twisted the blade before pulling it out.

“Well that was easy enough wasn’t it?” It said, coughing blood. “Menos Forest is one hell of a place boy. Nor the Hollow you’re looking for or the company he keeps are pushovers. Best of luck.” It said, as dark smoke began pouring from the freshly made wound. Its last words were genuine. It did wish Shuuryou the best knowing what he had ahead of him. The creature collapsed as Shuuryou began his long journey.


Present Day- Exams portion 5, Armed Combat
Though kido was permitted during this portion of the exam, it was simply referred to as the Armed Combat portion; rarely did a combatant have time to perform kido while attacking or defending blows from a wooden sword. Shuuryou now faced the highest ranking student. It’s said that he’d never lost a battle. Though not at large as the combatant which fell moments earlier, this one was still bigger than Shuuryou.

They stood facing one another, wooden swords at the ready. His opponent’s stance and hold on his weapon was noticeably different than what is taught in kendo. His stance was wider and he held his blade with single handed grip. Both of these led Shuuryou to believe that this specialized stance was made for wider, more diverse range of motion. How would his style fare against someone Shuuryou’s size?

Even after Instructor Ruki gave the order to begin, neither fighter moved. They stood in perfect stillness for several seconds. The slightest bend in his opponent’s knees prompted Shuuryou to attack. He found himself swinging at air as his opponent jumped overhead, twisting in the process. The proceeding sword strikes came in rapid succession, each connected, linked by a single elegant movement. Each was dodged or parried before his opponent descended with just as much ease and fluidity as a gently falling leaf.

His image blurred the moment both feet were on the ground. His flashstep was impressive, perhaps even more developed than Shuuryou’s own. He once again launched a series of sword swings at Shuuryou, twisting mid step. Regardless of his efforts, Shuuryou had seen this sword technique and successfully defended against it, it could beat him, but he couldn’t mount a proper counter attack either.

Suddenly something changed, a wooden sword brushed through the young boy’s hair. “That shouldn’t have happened.” Shuuryou thought. “There’s absolutely no way he’s fast enough to draw back and launch an attack that fast.” Shuuryou was partially correct. The second time the change came, he could see it clearly. His opponent was a dual sword user. His one handed grip was a front to distract from the fact that he carefully held two swords in one hand. Once after several swings he used both swords to deliver two strike at once.

Shuuryou was at an obvious disadvantage, his opponent came closer and closer to landing a blow across his head. However, because Shuuryou knew where his opponent was aiming, he could compensate. When next his opponent attempted to strike him with his secret technique, he countered with a technique of his own. “Hadou 1, Sho!” He said quickly, pointing at the incoming blow. His opponent’s secret weapon flew from his grip to the farthest wall, cracking it. A synchronous gasp came from those viewing. Was it Shuuryou’s use of kido in this situation that inspired it, or the fact that in the instant that kido landed, Shuuryou found himself disarmed.

His own wooden sword fell to the floor before being kicked away by his opponent. He quickly flash stepped towards it only to find his opponent was already there, waiting to strike. He no longer questioned whose shunpo was better. His opponent was years ahead of him in terms of this particular skill. Shuuryou barely dodged the technique waiting for him.

Again, Shuuryou flash stepped, not attempting to place distance between them, his opponent was faster and likely wouldn’t let him. He instead used the opportunity to cast yet another kido spell. “Bakudo number 8, Seki!” He said, exiting his flashstep. As expected his opponent was there waiting for him ready to strike. Only when he did strike, his blade connected with a tiny compressed ball of blue energy. Both the attack and his weapon were thrown violently against the wall nearest. “Way of binding number, Horin.” He said, pointing towards the man he just sent flying. The spiraling tendril of warmly colored energy jumped from his finger in an attempt to ensnare its intended target.

The fighter rose his sword and swatted at the tendril causing it to it instead of him. Shuuryou tugged at the wooden instrument, instantly snatching it from his opponent's grasp. Disarmed, his foe made his own attempt at a kido. He pointed his hands at Shuuryou. “Ye lord, mask..." He clearly knew his way around a hadou or two because the condensed orb of red energy had begun to form much earlier than would be expected considering he'd only just began to chant.

With a flashy spin and flick of his wrist Shuuryou quickly whipped the wooden sword he'd just taken across his opponent's head. The shear force with which the sword met his opponent's temple caused it to shatter and caused the fighter on the receiving end of the blow to fly through the air before falling into the laps of several of his classmates. He was out cold. This fight was over. It took a few seconds before the majority could piece together what had just happened.

"Hmph." Grunted Instructor Ruki, only partially surprised by his former student's offensive use for a kido only meant to restrain. He expected that as a result of the boy surviving Hueco Mundo he’d return with more developed skill, but this level of creativity was the result of him not only surviving in the land of Hollows, but thriving. Under what circumstances did he discover that the spell could be used this way? Such creativity and proficiency with kido would likely catch the eye of recruiters for the kido corps.

The glowing tendril flickered before dissipating. What was left of the wooden sword it held fell to the ground. Victorious, Shuuryou respectfully bowed to his defeated opponent and the exam proctors.

1 Year Ago

Menos Forest, home of thousands of Menos Grande and other Hollow that would eventually transform into the skyscraper like beasts. Were it not for his ability to mask his presence with kido he’d have fallen victim to their assault months ago. He spent years searching for Menos Forest and nearly died while foolishly attempting to force his way past the horde of Menos Grande seemingly awaiting his arrival. He defeated three of them before being overwhelmed and forced back for others which were attracted by the destruction.

He learned fairly quickly that the creatures weren’t capable of detecting his presence when masked. Even as he walked through the giant black crowds, brushing a few every so often, they were incapable of noticing him. This made travel through the forest easy enough. The most difficult part of life within the forest was finding shelter to perform tracking kido. He’d find a cave every so often and seek shelter within it. His careful planning allowed him to slowly gain ground on the hollow he was hunting.

The hollow’s reiatsu wrang fresh in his mind allowing him to use his kido to keep tabs on where the monster travelled. The hollow who first told him of the existence of menos forest was right about the monster he was hunting. It was no push over. Each member of the forces it travelled with contained a spiritual pressure which either matched or overshadowed his own when he first began tracking them. Of course that was months ago. Shuuryou had grown from a beautiful and skilled young boy to a young man still beaming with potential despite realizing a good portion of it. He was so close to achieving what he first arrived to do and the spiritual pressure he now held matched that of the bear-like hollow that sent him to the petrified forest.

One by one he picked off the hollows that allied themselves with his main target. Each one slayed increased his strengths, pushed him beyond his limits, and gave him insight into just who it was he was hunting. His target was known to all as Feer. As the name suggested, many believed it to be fear incarnate. It produced a fire that was attracted to the fear of targets. The special power it possessed lead some to say that it was a demon posing as a hollow. Regardless, Shuuryou had just recently slain the last of its party. Soon, he would end the one who killed his mother.

He finally tracked it into a clearing which was free of the landscape’s crystallized botany and Menos Grande. It stood still within the center of this clearing, eyes fixed on the moon directly overhead. Though its form was unfamiliar, the creature’s reiatsu was definitely the same as the one present when his mother was killed. Though it was far more massive due to the passage of time, the fear that Shuuryou felt was the exact same fear he felt on that accursed night. He wasn’t intimidated by the spiritual pressure he sensed coming from the beast. Yet he could feel all of the anger he felt and accumulated over the years being buried by underneath fear.

“This fear, it isn’t my own.” He thought as he approached the creature, concealed within his kido camouflage. His sword hand trembled as reached to unsheath his blade. “Is this another ability of this bastard?” He continued. “I haven’t been afraid of anything since that day. Even thinking about that night, when I first stood in this monster’s presence, it was never fear. It was anger and rage.” He finally drew his blade. “I can not…” He stood at Feer’s back. It stood at an impressive eight or nine feet tall. Its broad form was draped in what appeared to be black cloth. “I can NOT let go of this rage...because without it all I have is…”

“Fear...” Its cloth seemed to come to life. “I smell fear.” It turned to face Shuuryou. Its voice could only be described as terrible. It was as though it was made up of dozens of voices, all terrified. Its cloth stretched outward like the wings of a raven revealing a body clad in thorn like bones. Its form was that of a spike covered suit of armor. Two great horns were found atop its head. It inhaled deeply. Its massive nose, more beak like in appearance revealed its hunter’s location.

“No use in hiding.” It snarled as great flames poured from its nose. Shuuryou jumped backwards. Suddenly the fear he felt intensified. His confidence was shaken enough to undo the kido that was hiding his presence. His prey could now see him.

“A shinigami?” It snarled. More flames came from its nose. These flames screamed as if they were alive and in pain. They jumped at Shuuryou. They were exactly as they were described by his fallen allies.

“Danku!” Shuuryou shouted, erecting a large rectangular kido to block the incoming fire. It was an incomplete kido. Though it blocked the initial wave of fire it began to crack soon after. It wasn’t an issue of whether or not the barrier would hold up because the flames began to crawl up and around the barrier to reach him. “No…” Shuuryou said leaping backwards yet again towards the edge of the large clearing.

He was so consumed with fear that he’d lost track of his prey. Feer however, did not lose track of him. Shuuryou found himself the target of a ball of sinister spiritual energy; Feer had launched a cero. “Hadou 4, Byakurai!” He said, pointing towards the quickly approaching attack. It had come too close for Shuuryou to avoid being affected altogether. An explosion of blue lightning and red energy lit up the grounds. Though the damage was dampened Shuuryou was thrown into the air.

His fear was steadily growing, as was the intensity of the flames Feer had produced. They spiralled up towards Shuuryou who was separated from his zanpkuto from the blast. He’d already gone an extended amount of time without it in this land and barely survived, he would not survive this fight now without it. In that moment he cared more about getting it than he did protecting his own body. Fear had caused him to act unwittingly. Rather than creating another barrier, he reached for his zanpakuto off in the distance.

“Bakudo 9, Horin!” He shouted. A spiralling line of energy shot forth from his finger and attached itself to his zanpakuto. He pulled it towards him after regaining his footing midair. The flames had reached him. He swatted at them, as if that would help. They began crawling up his back. As they did, he retreated back to that night when these very flames had first touched his skin.

His mother’s love for him caused her to face down these same flames to save him. “Mother…you were so strong.” He cried out. Not in anguish, but in admiration. In that instant the fear he felt subsided. He throw his zanpakuto down at his target, kido tendril still attached. As predicted Feer had dodged the initial attack, however, with a flick of his wrist Shuuryou launched his blade yet again. This time, Feer was struck. The flames instantly died.

“Impressive.” Feer said, blood streaming down his arm. “I’ve seen that only a few times before. However the absence of fear is only temporary.”

“Then I guess I will have to kill you before it returns.” Shuuryou responded, tugging at the tendril. It vanished after his zanpakuto was once again in hand.

“Is that so Shinigami?” Feer laughed. “What have I done to cause you to throw away your life?”

“You killed my mother.” Shuuryou said. “You attacked Seireitei and killed my mother.” As he spoke he could feel his fear slowly building once more. He began chanting before releasing his zanpakuto. It began to spin of its own accord, or rather due to the kido Shuuryou had begun creating. “Hadou 58, Ten…”

“Ah, I remember being brought to Soul Society by Shinigami a short time ago…” He interrupted. His response caused Shuuryou to stop what he was doing. His zanpakuto continued to spin, though the speed of its rotations had decreased. “The Gotei 13 capture me and foolishly handed me over to a house of nobles.”

Shuuryou was shocked. The creature had no need to lie if it was so confident in its victory. Why on earth would the Gotei 13 capture this monster only to hand it over to a noble house? His subconscious had instantly linked the incident with his fathers noble house and their disdain for his mother. His conscious would never make such a ridiculous connection. However, it was then that he heard a voice. It was powerful and masculine. “Everything comes full circle Shuuryou.” The voice said. It seemed as though time had stopped.

“You will come to realize that this isn’t the end you thought it would be young prince. This is only the beginning. In truth, there is no end.” His zanpakuto pulsated with a dim light. “Your subconscious and conscious circulate ideas Shuuryou.” It was his zanpaktou that was talking. “The feminine voice from before, was that also you?” He thought. “See, look at that, you’re doing it.” The femine voice from years beforehand responded. “You are making progress.

“Come now…” The masculine voice said. “Use your conscious and subconscious to uncover the key to making this endless journey.” A large man appeared next to Feer. He stood covered in the finest cloth and metal accessories. The staff he held in hand was a sight to behold. A black ring twisted and spiraled at its head, completely autonomous of the staff beneath it.

“Everything comes full circle, Tsuneni Kingu.” Shuuryou said, as time began to flow normally. His zanpakuto began to resonate and augment with an intense blackness. It spun and twisted until finally its form had settled. A large black ring with several blades lining its edge fell to the ground and embedded itself within the surface. “This is you Tsuneni Kingu?” He thought. “You’ll obviously deliver massive damage given your size alone, but you except me to be able to land an accurate hit with you given your shape?”

“A shikai?” Feer said, stepping backwards. “The one who capture me used a shikai...were you hiding your true strength all this time.”

Shuuryou hadn’t bothered to answer. He had no time to. His fear was still returning. “Bakudo 21, Sekeinton.” A red cloud of smoke exploded from Shuuryou’s location, hiding him. He began chanting. A rod of condensed glowing energy formed in his hand. He threw it into the air. It drew Feer’s attention before Shuuryou jumped from the cloud of smoke and swung his ring blade at Feer. As expected, the hollow dodged the attack. Before the monster could counter, the heavenly stepping rail Shuuryou had launched earlier descended in mass down upon the battlefield.

Several impaled unsuspecting his opponent. Unable to move, Shuuryou slashed at Feer once again, this time making contact. A broad horizontal slash made its way across his the hollow’s face not only blinding Feer, but partially decapitating the beast. Blood and reiatsu exploded from the horrid mask that comprised its face as chips of bone fell from it. Feer let out screams of pain before the bony chips that fell earlier jumped from the ground and fixed themselves back in place. Feer’s pain had stopped.

“What? I thought you slashed me-” Feer’s mask once again exploded in wave of blood, bone, and reiatsu. “What’s happening?!” The hollow screamed, falling backwards grabbing at its head. Again, the wound reverted back its original state. Seconds later, the explosive damage returned. “NO! Stop, stop this madness!” Feer shouted.

Shuuryou watched on in amazement before finally gathering himself. He’d accomplished what he’d come to do, but there was more to the story of his mother’s death than he knew. This hollow would help him shed light on what had remained hidden for so long. “I will make this pain stop. All that you need to do it tell me how you came to attack Seiteitei.”

Feer replied cooperatively. He told Shuuryou of the time it roamed the human world in its arrogance before being attacked by Shinigami. It told Shuuryou of how the research and science division sought to experiment on its powers instead of killing it. It then told Shuuryou of a noble family using its connections to the gotei 13 to arrange for it to attack a specific district. Feer escaped while its handlers confirmed that the person it was meant to attack had been killed. The hollow didn’t know who his target was, but after killing dozens, the one they wanted killed was among them.

Was this person Shuuryou’s mother? Was this creature lying? He lost himself in thought before being overcome with a rage that not even Feer’s ability could conquer. Shuuryou lifted his zanpakuto and shoved it into his prey’s wound once it reopened. “Hadou 11, Tsuzuri Raiden.” He muttered. Arcs of electricity raced around his zanpakuto and surged through Feer’s body. What were mere seconds likely felt like hours to the monster being fried alive. Smoke rolled from his body as it turned to dust. An anti climactic battle to symbolize that though this was the end of one quest, it was only the beginning of another. Shuuryou then sat, legs folded. He began to recover his energies. He would need them to cast the necessary kido and make his way back to Soul Society.

Present Day

Shuuryou had no doubt passed his Shino academy exams with flying colors. As he lay his head down to rest after the long day he thought back to the final portion of his exam. The release phrase of his zanpakuto seemed to foreshadow a change in Shuuryou that Instructor Ruki could never have predicted. He would eventually come to have faith in his former student.

“To understand a concept that goes beyond vengeance, that is what it will take to master a zanpakuto the likes of what you have.” -Instructor Ruki

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on Tue May 27, 2014 11:49 am

RP Sample:
"Your task is to do whatever it takes to seize the following artifact and eliminate its keeper." The words of Buku 2's handler seemed to replay on their own with each second he spent observing his apparent target. "Our intelligence tells us that your own combat skills may be dwarfed when compared to those of your target. You are to assume that you are outmatched in terms of speed, strength, and perhaps even intelligence." Buku 2 had spent several hours following the white haired humanoid. The beings movements were not in agreeance with information Buku 2 had been given. The way the target moved was not the least bit reminiscent of someone skilled in shinobi style arts. His movements did however mimic those of a warrior trained in the way of the samurai. Each step, each move made by the white haired humanoid figure imitated those of warriors who would serve under a shogunate.

Though his thoughts were many, Buku 2 never allowed them to interfere with his own movements. He continued to trail his target from overhead, placing each hand and foot in a carefully orchestrated pattern taking brief records of each rusted hole that riddled the ancient metal pipeline.

It wasn't until reaching the end of that pipeline that the rusted bolts supporting it were ripped from the ceiling. Before the first bolt fell to the ground below Buku 2 launched himself to the opposite side of the room. The moment he landed he hid behind a metal box while keeping his eyes on his target. The entire time that Buku 2 spent watching him the white haired man had been searching for something among the wreckage of the Ancient Factory.

Once the first bolt hit the ground his attention was drawn to the ceiling. He gazed upwards towards the ceiling, dimly lit by what few shattered windows lined the room. He gripped the hilt of his sword but didn't draw it. Almost a minute had passed before he broke his gaze and took his hand from the hilt.

A tickling feeling brushed Buku 2's knuckles. He took his eyes off of his target for a split second to get a look at what brushed against his hand. It was a rat. With a flick of his wrist he swatted at the rat. Upon contact the rat let out the smallest screech before running away.

His target noticed. This time his gaze was fixed on Buku 2's location. He didn't stare for as long as he had stared up at the ceiling before turning his back. He hadn't simply ignored the noise; after turning his back he drew his sword. He quickly turned back towards Buku 2 and with a single swing he unleashed an untamed winter fury.

A wave of frozen air swept across the metal floor and collided with the metal box, breaking it to bits. Buku 2 had watched the collision from the ceiling with a small amount of confusion. His target's attack had left him plenty of time to escape to another pipeline on the ceiling, but once again his target's action didn't match up with information given by his handler.

His target was supposed to be a master of shinobi style arts and strange blades. Still, he had carried out missions with inaccurate information before; only in the past, the information had never been off to such a degree. Any peace of the box that was still visible was completely blanketed in a layer of ice. The way that he swung his blade confirmed Buku 2's original theory, he was trained in the art of the samurai.

Buku 2 had yet to face a swordsman that could instantly create ice, however the same tactics used to fight other strange opponents could be employed here.
His eyes, hidden behind black shades, went blank as he activated his sublime empathic abilities. The calm and placid field that was once his target's mind slowly began to change as Buku 2 planted the seeds of fear. He watched for a response. Each passing second showed that his current target was no normal fighter.

Where most would begin to show all of the physical signs of someone being affected by fear: dilated pupils, tightened muscles, shortened breathing, and increased sweating, his target simply stood there sword in hand. It took nearly twice as much time for his target to show any signs that his emotions were being manipulated. His eyes began to shift from side to side. He was without a doubt nervous, but he wasn't showing as much fear as Buku 2 would have expected.

It was enough for the next phase of his plan to be carried out though. After bending his palm towards his wrist his claw blades silently sprung forth. He jammed them into the rusted ceiling and quickly launched himself to another area of the factory. The target responded as Buku 2 had predicted, once again he launched a wave of frozen air at the source of the noise. The factory walls shook violently as an enormous chunk of the ceiling crashed into the floor. When the dust settled the target stood frozen in fear.

The moment that Buku 2 had been waiting for had finally come to fruition. His target was at the edge of a breakdown. Just as he had done on the ceiling he jabbed his claws into the surface of the ancient factory, and moved on to the next area. His target once again fired a wave of frozen air. His attack did not end with a single move; Over the coarse of several seconds he had launched dozens of frozen attacks throughout the room, many of which just barely missed Buku 2.

The noise, dust, and large amount of metal fragments in the air provided perfect cover for Buku 2 to end his target's struggle, however his opponent's attacks were as strong as they were in the beginning, though he had used the powerful ability more than a dozen times. His target's technique was without flaw even though he was consumed by fear, and his stamina seemed to be unwavering.

A final attack sent a powerful shockwave to every corner of the room. The remainder of the ceiling collapsed along with each wall. Both fighters managed to dodge the falling rubble; Buku 2 naturally finding evasion of the falling metal to be a minimal challenge. When the last of the metal scrappage hit the floor Buku 2 stood atop the large pile. It took several minutes for the dust to settle, but once it did it was Buku 2 that stood with an apparent victory. He gazed upon his target, seemingly unconscious, half covered in metal scraps. He quickly reached his opponent and knelt down beside him.

"Lieutenant Muso, surrender the precious artifact in your possession and you will be allowed to go on without sustaining further damage. If you refuse to comply..." After reaching down and checking his target for a pulse a final and vital piece of information, given to him by his handler, echoed through his subconscious mind. "Your target is a member of the immortal race." This was not his target, if it had been he would still retain a pulse. He glanced down at his gauntlet after failing to retract his claw blades. Several pieces of ice were jamming the opening. His attention was drawn back to his opponent after hearing the sound of ice crystals forming.

Not only was his opponent conscious, but he was inhaling deeply. After puckering his lips he exhaled, releasing a chilly, and powerful, wind. Buku 2 was instantly lifted from his feet and thrown backwards at break-neck speeds. He nearly lost consciousness after hitting a pile of rusted metal.

The moment he tried to stand his body was pinned by the same wind that threw him the long distance. Not only had his opponent recovered, but he was now on the offensive. Nearly a minute had passed before he was standing over Buku 2, the cold air slowly beginning to burn his exposed skin. Buku 2 had never been pinned by his opponent. Would this be the end? No. Once his shades cracked his opponent ceased his attack. That moment would be all that he needed to launch a counterattack, however the freezing winds had left him defenseless. Thick layers of ice had covered his hands and abdomen, Buku 2 was going nowhere.

"So then, I take it that you are searching for Muso also? If you are fighting for the gods, then we are on the same side." His voice was anything but normal. Though his words were clear and well pronounced, Buku 2 could hear an undertone of what could be best described as sounds of a winter storm. "I am Yuki, avatar to the Goddess of Winter." Buku 2 had no idea who he was working for, only that his agency had been commissioned to eliminate Muso and claim the artifact he was protecting. "Yes, I was sent to eliminate Muso. You'll have to forgive my actions, I was told that I would find him here. I had assumed that you were him being that you were the only other..." Yuki rose his blade and pressed the very tip against Buku 2's neck.

A small stream of blood poured from the cut. "Sorry, just making sure." He removed his blade from Buku 2's neck and sheathed it. "If You're bleeding then you're no immortal." He turned his back to the defenseless Buku 2 and began to walk off. "You should be more careful with who you attack. Friendly fire may cause us to lose the war. Don't worry about the ice. In a few minutes you should be able to break free." Once Yuki was out of view Buku 2 unleashed the claw blades hidden in his boots. In an extraordinary display of flexibility he began kicking at the ice at his arms, carefully hacking away at it. Once his arms were free he broke away the ice covering his abdomen. After standing he turned on the com piece in his ear. "Handler. Buku 2 has made contact with the supposed target. Information was false, an avatar was the only being at this location. He is also searching for Lieutenant Muso." A few seconds passed before he received a response."Handler to Buku 2, follow him. If he allows you to work with him in capturing Muso do so. If he shows any signs of interfering with your own mission you are to kill him. Handler out."

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Appearance: 3+
Personality: 3+
Combat: 3+
History: 10+
RP Sample: 10+

Ready for Approval: Almost
Tier Assessment: 3-3
Comments: a good overall app with an extensive history and rp sample. There could have been a little more in the other sections however.

Forever wrote:Name: Forever
Effect: An ability held only by the golden circle blade.
This causes a sword strike to span on into forever. A simple cut on a surface which begins as something barely superficial will grow and deepen until the cut completely makes its way through what was in its path. For example, if the skin on an arm is cut, even after the blade is removed the cut grows. It may only break the epidermis but it will eventually cut through the dermis, the subcutis, veins, arteries, muscle, tendon, and bone before eventually cutting through those same layers in reverse, on the opposite side of the body part that was struck. This cut spans on into forever, or so long as Forever is present. This takes separate post to cut through various layers comprising a target. When it comes to the living, it must first cut through spiritual pressure. For opponents of lesser tiers this happens almost instantly. The ability then cuts through skin, muscle, bone in that order before traveling through the same layers on the side opposite the cut. It takes one post to cut through each layer. For opponents of higher tiers however, the spiritual pressure they possess is denser and therefor takes longer to cut through. Opponents a single tier higher have spiritual pressure which takes one post to cut through. A target two tiers higher has spiritual pressure which takes two posts to cut through(and so on, each tier higher adds an additional post). Specialties like Hierro add an additional post. The cutting effect continues until the circle blade is struck by someone. This breaksdisrupts the flow of Forever but doesn't reverse the damage caused. The spiritual pressure initially cut through may replenish and create a protective layer once more, but the damage to the physical body will remain unless a healing ability is present.

We talked about this. you can't have a "one hit and you are screwed" ability like this. after being struck once, they can basically kiss their limb goodbye. if they are struck in the chest, they die no matter what. my suggestion would be to combine the effects of both of your abilities into one. each time you cut an opponent, not only does the original cut reopen, but it increases the depth of previous cuts, to the extent you want. this makes it more fair to the other rp'ers and more fun in general to roleplay.

on Wed May 28, 2014 9:22 pm

I decided to PM you instead of making this public right away.

Mushami Shuuryou wrote:The ability is fine as is. It's a power that depends on creativity for success. This is far from a one hit KO zanpakuto ability. We didn't talk about this and you would know that if you actually took the time to compare and contrast what we actually talked about. An afflicted person has more options to stop the effect now compared to what was originally discussed. I have no interest your suggestions for either abilities because you still aren't getting it. They are two different takes on the same concept and they do not overlap in the sense that you suggest.

Also, what on earth are you guys doing with grading. I can't believe that I'm only just noticing this. Lol You MUST follow the guidelines which are publicly listed. Appearance, Personality, History, and RP Sample. I'm not sure but I think you're mixing up or combining the old style of grading and the new one.

This app, at the very minimum is a 3-2 app currently. Am I really going to have to resort to linking previously graded apps which are graded correctly according to intended standards to this one? Let's try to keep things consistent by keeping the grading standards/tactics the same regardless of who is grading.

This is a 3-3 app: http://www.bleachstory.net/t4918-rei-mihara-finished

This is also a 3-3 app: http://www.bleachstory.net/t4996-alastair-knightfield

This is also a 3-3 app: http://www.bleachstory.net/t4953-anciano-salvia-done

This is a 3-2 app: http://www.bleachstory.net/t5069-valkyrie

This is also a 3-2 app DESPITE it being of lower quality than my own app which you gave a 3-3: http://www.bleachstory.net/t4973-bradley-kirezen-visored-finished



Please look over my app and reconsider.

Thank you for your consideration and effort. :urharaftw:

The above was a statement I sent to Daemon. This app was a 3-1 from the start before Eden took it upon herself to lower the tier so that there weren't too many high tiers running around. This app has since then been built on in all required sections which were publicly voted on and are now publicly posted. I suggest that all graders go back and review standards because you clearly aren't understanding them and if you aren't understanding them you shouldn't be grading.

The response I received is as follows:

[quote="Daemon Tetsuyo]This is what i have said i believe the app to be, and i'm sticking with it. having an extensive History and RP Sample does not an app make. i thought you were a little lacking in a few areas, otherwise i would have said 3-2. you were very close, but in my opinion, not quite there. and besides, there is a reason we have more than one moderator grade the same app. its so that we can voice our opinions, and compare them. if you don't like what i've said, that's fine. wait for another mod. don't come crying to me thinking you've been given the short end of the stick. [/quote]

I took the route suggested in the past when it comes to calling graders out on their faults (PM a person first as to not make the forum look bad). In truth though, it is not me or actions like this that make the forum look bad, it if crew inconsistency. I think it interesting that not only are you not following standards, but you are also changing the way you grade based on the crew's self decided need to grade more "strictly". You did after all give an app I made not too long ago with less detail a 3-2 originally, remember? http://www.bleachstory.net/t5195-elcubo-dedatos?highlight=Elcubo

I will ask crew one more time to maintain consistency. It shouldn't matter who is grading because the standards are posted publicly. Regardless of who is grading EVERY single grader should arrive at the same conclusion due to the fact that standards that were voted on and posted publicly for individuals to pick and choose what tier they want their own character to start off as.

I'm going to leave this here to give all of you something to think about. Don't take too much time though, crew inactivity has already cost me a good amount of time and is the main reason I am not on the AML. Let's get this settled so that I can do the main thing I came here to do, RP. Do what you are supposed to do and stop giving me reasons to complain. Thank you.

Regards,

Shuuryou  seriously? 



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on Wed May 28, 2014 10:31 pm

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First off, we do not allow members to re-do apps and submit them for a different grade. What we were allowing you to do is revamp the zanpakutou.

I agree with Daemon that Forever is a bit too OP and need to be changed. (didn't see it earlier) Maybe add a few ways to stop the effect?

Here is the original app:
http://www.bleachstory.net/t5245-mushami-shuuryou-complete

It was approved for 3-3, and this one shall remain tier 3-3.

Thank you. =]

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on Wed May 28, 2014 10:47 pm

As I stated in the c-box, you should reconsider your statement. New character with similarities to the old but they are not the same. The history and zanpakuto shows that. As do the differences throughout the app which incorporate the new history and zanpakuto concepts.

Thank you for your consideration.

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Appearance: 3+
Personality: 3+
History: 10+
RP Sample: 6+
Overall Quality: A very good app overall with not many grammar and spelling errors. A good history and rp sample and a hell of a read. Nothing particular stands out as unique about the character except for his looks and his personality traits concerning his appearance overall. I would grade for 3-2, honestly.

Techniques:
What Daemon said. It is basically a "one cut and you are screwed". Please add in some ways to stop the 'forever' and make it so that someone can escape it. I would even recommend a tier effect chart for both to avoid confusion during roleplay. We often require members to add these to their abilities. So if you could do it, that would be awesome. ^.^ I know how they effect tiers is already in the paragraph, but this can help us better and you in the long term.

Great job! ^.^ Please edit and bump!

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in regards to Elcubo, i was actually told by other staffers that i was being too loose with the grading at the time. i had yet to go through training. having done that, i am now able to grade more effectively. i will talk to yuki about your grade, and we will decide on a final tier.

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