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on Sun Dec 11, 2011 6:43 pm


I have some issues with this. Seeing as it's already approved, I am not denying it. Feel free to ignore what I am about to say, I am simply writing it for additional feedback for you.

The first thing is... Way too many elements up there. Shadow, etc aren't elements. Shadow is simply the absence of light. It can't do much unless puppetteered by reiatsu.

The only true elements are





The rest are simply by-products of these elements. Because your list is so extensive on top of your other forms and abilities, I'd ask that you cut down to four (you can pick any four, but personally I would go with those four) and work from there.

As for their effects, I think Wind is good. I approve wind.

Fire is good. It mimics a seele shneider (which is already approved due to canon), so there are no issues with that one.

Water isn't okay. See, your sword styles are supposed to be about the emulation of the elements or minor addition to supplement your sword styles. At least, that's what I got when I read your description for it in your app. With water, you're actually just building a construct out of it. That isn't helping your sword style. That isn't even a sword style. It's water bending.

Same goes with Earth. How is creating walls of earth a sword style?

And after that, you started getting into just creating techniques using the element. You don't even mention your sword in the ice one.

Lightning is good.

Shadow is good because it uses shadows as a metaphor instead of an actual weapon. I like it.

And we don't have vampires or undead on this site casually. They're more of an event thing. So Light is basically useless. I suggest you use your shiny, shiny blade to reflect light into your enemies eyes or something for that style. Every movement you make ends up with them having light in their eyes, etc.

But anyway. That's just my two cents. Like I said, you're already approved, so go for it if you want.


on Sun Dec 11, 2011 6:51 pm


You,do have a point,however grimm. Ash perhaps taking,into concideration what grimm has said would end up with a better all round style


on Mon Dec 12, 2011 2:00 am


Ok it should be more agreeable now and the water style i styled it after a sword style in Hitman Reborn don't have the energy to read thogh the manga to get the style name at the moment but i will post it later.


on Mon Dec 12, 2011 2:13 am


Yeah, that's better.


on Mon Dec 12, 2011 6:09 pm


Yes much. Thanks ash,for changing it and thanks grimm for being my second eyes on it

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