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on Sun Aug 04, 2013 11:44 am




Who are you?







    Name:Dorian Adavette
    Alias:The Seasonal Phoenix
    Age:25
    Age of Appearance:25
    Gender:Male
    Race/Species:Shinigami/Human
    Character Alignment:Chaotic Good

    Appearance:He has short, black, dreaded hair and brown pupil eyes. His body has a sudden combination of bulk and lightness. His facial hair is a goatee located on his chin and is very short. He is 6 ft 2 inch in height and is 220 in weight. The skin tone is a light brown, being a descent of an African lifestyle. Muscle tone is normal, because of his balance to his attributes. Both of his arms are normally toned to the use of a zanpakuto.
                          He is slightly attractive for his due to being banged up during battles. He have normal eyes that change in color to hint out an emotional switch. He has a normal chin along with a straight up neck. And for teeth, they can change from fixed and straight to sharp and dragon like during combat. He is skinny, but is buff in torso and in the legs.


    Style/Clothing:Dorian looks like an average person outside the soul society. He has black jeans along with a blue and black plaid long shirt as a signature style. He can be very two sided on wearing sweaters that doesn't go under his clothing during winter days. Dorian is extremely fond of short and sandals in the beach or casually. The colors can change due to his shift of personality.  

    Tattoo's/Scars/Etc:Suddenly, the only scar that he has is a neck scar that was severely fatal during a massive attack that ended bitter sweetly.
    Personality:Dorian is... Special. He has an abnormal split personality disorder from a psychological moment that remains a mystery. The first (Blue Feather) side is a calm and normally emotional idealist that encourages atmosphere through music, games, and places. The second (Yellow Scaled) side however is a psychotic, fun loving, perverted optimist who enjoys living to the highest extent with a low limit until the other personality comes out of nowhere and takes over. When Dorian is bleeding from the forehead in the Yellow Scaled personality, he starts to acts animalistic and starts to kill without remorse.
                         
                             He is remarkably friendly and lovable to everyone even with both sides in his psyche. When he's angry he can either ignore the problem and forgive quietly or turn into a loudmouth yapper who won't shut up. In his personal. He is known for having a tranquil meditative state that turns him highly nice and acceptable. When depressed, he turns into a stoic like negative thinker who thinks twice at life. The signs of his emotional status is told by the color of his eyes.  
     

       
      (For Likes, Dislikes, Ambitions, etc, go for 1-3 sentences per point, more if you wish.)

    Likes:

    • Despite having two sides of his personality, he has a massive love for automobiles.

    • Eating large quantities of foods count as his soothing satisfaction.

    • Humor count as a signature as his favorite is physical humor.

    • Being a people person has good intentions for others, mostly on females.



    Dislikes:

    • He has a complete hatred of jerks, saying if one did something to his friends or loved ones, he would turn him into a bloody mess. (dismemberment if female)

    • He don't like to be mocked for lacking common sense.

    • Comparing him to a stronger shinigami that is a friend or is respected by him triggers a humorous rant.



    Ambitions/Dreams/Goals:

    • Completing his orders to become the next captain of the Gotei 13.

    • Wants to die in peace.

    • Eating the most delicious pastry in his life.



    Strengths:

    • The personalities changes fighting style from expert swordsmanship to professional hand-to-hand combat.

    • Having a phoenix spirit depletes the sensation to feel pain.

    • Reiatsu runs more power by emotion and willpower.

    • Can Regenerate.

    • Can have a bloodlust if no choices were made.



    Fears & Weaknesses:

    • Can't feel pain, CAN get affected by it. (worst if fatal)

    • Full power and slow regeneration can weaken and/or damage his psyche, spiritual power, and/or body.

    • Severely ruptured right lung.

    • Can get hopeless if enemy is strong than him.

    • Lack of Hado.



           









    Battle Specs








       
    List of 'Known' Skills:


    • Shunpo

    • Basic Reiatsu Detection

    • *If more need to be added let a Mod/Admin know*





       Fighting Style:Dorian was always a fan of the term "Up Close And Personal" in mostly every fight he's been. He is both a master in both hand-to-hand (Kung-fu) and sword (Kenjutsu) combat.

    Personal Abilities:

      (Shinigami may not start with more than ONE personal ability. Personal abilities are special powers unique to your character. They are obtained at birth or through freak occurrences. These cannot be things you would able to teach others or simply obtain through hard work along.)


      Name:Burning Balance
      Effect:Dorian can used this to produce the element of fire out of his sheer reiastu. For fire, his defense and offense is improve for a slight bit. Surely with this, Dorian is still in training to slowly perfect one element to fully master this technique.   

      General Techniques:

      (Shinigami may NOT start with more than four general techniques. Techniques are not extra abilities, but rather, skills which use your abilities in more extreme forms beyond their basic use. For example... let's say I can shoot fire from my fingers. A technique might be gathering a whole bunch of fire for a few minutes and then shooting a fire-laser from my fingers, doing much more damage than what my ability normally would on it's own. Other special or basic techniques using your normal control over your spiritual energy can also be added here, like adding reiatsu to your punches to inflict more damage, and things like that. Think of abilities as special powers - and think of techniques as moves which use the powers you already have. These are moves your character was taught or trained and developed on their own. They are things anyone would be able to learn and perform unless they are dependent on your unique race or abilities. Examples are custom shunpo variations, hakuda/zanjutsu techniques, and using your reiatsu on an object to simulate telekinesis.)
      These are not used for extra shikai or bankai techniques, elemental techniques, extra abilities and powers.
      Limit 4.


        Technique Name: Aohonō no Eikyō (Blue Flame Impact)
        Technique Description:Must wait 3 posts to use again. The technique creates a reiatsu feedback to the arms, creating a strong power spike to burn an opponent with a strike of blue fire. Is hard to control to people that are stronger. 
        Technique Effect Chart:

        *The effect chart is for damage, durability, or any other after effect of a technique. The damage/effect/etc will be based off of tiers.*

        Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower:The opponent hit by it will get fierce burns or broken bones. Slightly heavy damage.
        Opponent is One Tier Lower:The damage will be normally effective and might have minor burns. Minor damage.  
        Opponent is Equal Tier:The opponent will get burnt lightly and light damage due to Dorian's minimal control of technique.
        Opponent is One Tier Higher:Opponent can run through winds, but will have very low damage.  
        Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher:Opponent can easily blocked technique with small injuries, but no damage.




        Technique Name:Inferno Healing
        Technique Description:Dorian can produce flaming reiatsu that heals instead of burns by filling the wounded up with energy. The rate of healing is as follows:

        Technique Effect Chart:

        *For each rank weaker a target is, the number of posts for each level of healing decreases. For each rank higher, the posts increase by one.*

        1 post: Heals small cuts and injuries. (Small)
        2 posts: Heals small cuts and injuries. (Small)
        3 posts: Heals moderate bleeding cuts and injuries (Minor)
        4 post: Heals broken bones, heavy cuts and injuries. (Heavy)
        5 post: Heals broken bones, heavy cuts and injuries. (Heavy)


         



      Shinigami's Partner





      Zanpakuto Name:Furaingukyōki
      Zanpakuto Element:Fire and Lightning
      Sealed Weapon Appearance:A katana with a black and blue long tsuka. The tsuba is a circle with gold lightning bolts one on side and blue fire on the next.

      Spirit Appearance:There are two spirits in the zanpakuto and they are the two personalities in Dorian's mind named Tanzionai and Zumikori. They both wear longcoats and black bottoms, but one's wearing Blue and one's wearing Yellow. Tanzionai is a long haired man with a full goatee and Zumikori is a short haired man with a short beard.
      Spirit Personality:Compared to Dorian, they are mostly tamed. Tanzionai shockingly is a timid and laid back sleeper that wants a more conformable placed to relax. Zumikori is a hyperactive, sweet tooth that is a completionist when it comes to missions.
      Inner World:Dorian's inner world is a watercolor like mirror that is surrounded with mountains and oceans and temperature is changing repeatedly like a flickering light. It rains when something happens to Dorian outside the world.

      Shikai Release Phrase:Turn up the lights, Furaingukyōki!
      Shikai Appearance:Furaingukyōki grows a inch and the tsuba is now a phoenix and a dragon flying in a circular motion. The blade now has a black carbon body with a iron edge. The tsuka is now straight and has a rope with a steel ring with an infinity symbol.
      Shikai Abilities:

      (Shinigami may start with ONE shikai ability; you may have two shikai abilities only if you can get the tier of 3-3 or stronger. If you have two anyway and fail to get that tier, you will simply have to lock one of the abilities so you can't use them until you hit the appropriate rank. Shikai abilities are only usable in Shikai - they do not apply in bankai or your sealed form.)



        Name:Elemental Switch
        Effect:Dorian now can from fire to lighting by a single command. "Burn" for the fire element and increase of endurance to lower damage and "Spark" for lightning and increase in speed to heighten defense.  


        Shikai Techniques: (Shinigami are allowed to start with no more than SIX shikai techniques)


          Technique Name:Mugen Shōtotsu (Infinite Collision)
          Technique Description:A charge attack that uses blue flames as an acceleration burst. 5 posts until another use.
          Technique Effect Chart:

          *The effect chart is for damage, durability, or any other after effect of a technique. The damage/effect/etc will be based off of tiers.*

          Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower:Stab the opponent in a critical manner, causing the opponent to bleed heavily. Causes heavy damage. Opponent barely dodges.
          Opponent is One Tier Lower:A stab to one of the opponent's limbs. The limbs are bloodied and limped after attack. Causes minor damage. Opponent normally dodges.
          Opponent is Equal Tier:Dorian hits opponent, but opponent is slightly injured. Causes light damage. Opponent highly dodges.
          Opponent is One Tier Higher:The opponent dodges successfully and gets low damage. The opponent gets a small gash.
          Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher:The move doesn't hit the target at all and causes very low damage whatsoever.




          Technique Name:Shōmei bōsai (Lighting Disaster)
          Technique Description:Dorian creates an electrical current on the ground to trap the enemy. 6 posts until use again.

          Technique Effect Chart:

          *The effect chart is for damage, durability, or any other after effect of a technique. The damage/effect/etc will be based off of tiers.*

          Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower:Opponent will be trapped for 2 posts and shocks burns and paralyzes the opponent's body. Opponent can barely dodge.
          Opponent is One Tier Lower:Trapped for 1 post and opponent's limbs are paralyzed. Opponent can dodge from it.  
          Opponent is Equal Tier:Will be effective, but shocks the opponent lightly.
          Opponent is One Tier Higher:Opponent can attack and shocks are slightly harmless. Can dodge.  
          Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher:Opponent can use heavy attacks, but gets damaged. Cannot get shocked. Can dodge from technique.






        Tell me your story...





        History:
        Dorian Adavette was born from a dysfunctional yet calm family back in 1997. During a BBQ, a bird flew in front of him and he gave it a loaf of bread. Ever since then, he learned to keep calm and be nice to the world so that it can repay him. He lived a perfectly good life when he turned 4 in a nice house located in a nice neighborhood. All of it changed 2 years later in 2003 when a glowing diamond feather landed on his window, and it talked to him saying his name. Dorian hid the feather with him and realizing that he'd looked older and took advantage of this great feat for years to come.

        At age 10, he learned to use the feather as a necklace and officially goes through a transformation from a obedient little kid, to a hot-blooded prodigy. The feather aided a boy to a portal to another world, a world that would change his life. He entered the portal and woke up on a town called Karakura. He told that he wanted somewhere to stay so he went to the nearest apartment tricked that he was older and stayed for an entire year. The boy learned to clone himself for the original world so that can he live in Karakura a little bit longer.

        The feather said that he's on his limit and said that it is Dorian's lesson alone to gain a better life. So the feather left, leaving Dorian alone ready for a second life to go along his old one. During his stay, he rearrange his apartment, got the food to last him a month, register to Karakura High and passed on living alone. Then that day happened that actually changed him...

        A monster attacked him when he was coming home form school and was one the brink of death. Luckily, a man wearing black attack and killed the monster saving Dorian. The man says if he was okay, Dorian replied with 'that. was. AWESOME'! The man was confused with his reaction saying that if he was insane. Dorian said no, replying with a thumbs up and a smile meaning bye. After a few steps, another monster swatted Dorian to the man in black, getting stabbed in the process.

        As Dorian regain consciousness, he realized a fatal wound on his stomach and breathed heavily to the pain. He laid to the grounded, dying as he crawled to the man in black to see if HE was okay. The man in black was out cold with a bloody chest also in the brink of death. The monster want to finish them both off, but the man in black grab Dorian in the arm and is shocked due to the fact that he has hidden powers. Dorian looked at the man in black holding his sword and stabbing Dorian in the chest, but is still alive in shock. He give Dorian his powers and dies in the process, with Dorian having a change in mood from confused and ditzy, to violent and vengeful. He block the monster's attack and cuts his arm off with ease. Dorian tries to get the finishing blow, but accidentally makes cuts the hole of the monster, realizing that's its weakness. He looks at the hollow as it is fading away into ash and Dorian looking at his new wardrobe in confusion. He went back home, only to find out that the feather he had before returned home. The feather told him that you now have of the powers of a shinigami, or a soul reaper. Dorian reacted and fainted for no apparent reason.

        The next morning, he'd woke up and saw that his wardrobe has disappeared out of plain sight. The stomach wound he had last night was sealed like nothing happened to it. He tiredly walked to the bedroom as he laid in peace, finally noticing that have the power to make his life have meaning. As he tries to sleep, he said to himself in a smile, that is this what i was destined to be? He saw his sword next to his feather and rest in a peaceful slumber, waiting for another moment like last night to happen that would be grand for his new life as a man of ideals and risks. That is the essence of his new life as a soul reaper in secret.



        RP Sample:

      Dorian walked in the crowd of thousands in the streets of the Soul Society limping, hoping to make it to the 4th Division for a quick heal. After the long travel, he made it to the 4th Division in a calm style.

      "Hello, sir. How can I hel- *Looks at Dorian* It's you!"

      "*Confused* Huh? Do I know you?"

      (*Thinking?* Its been months since we met. I am sudden he's trained had enough to come here.)" Oh! I t-totally forgot to tell my n-name. My name is Himawari Migi, An academy graduate and novice healer of the 4th Division. I have-*Sighs*- A cluttered charm with my p-patients."  

      "Sounds like having stress is a problem for your side of the story. Let me guess, you're a ditz of a nurse or just plain shy on the the job?"  

      As soon as Himawari can reply, The man that trained Dorian a few months before ask her for a fix of his sore arm.

      "*Loudly* Hey there, Dori! You were training like an addict, were you?"  

      "Narihibiku. I thought you were in an assignment."

      "I was, but the truth is..."

      When they were having a conversation for 3 hours, Dorian and Narihibiku were accounted a few minutes later to find a hollow that was shooting three rounds of Ceros on an unknown location. As they made it to that location, the hollow trapped them in a secret place that would collapses if someone uses shikai.                                                

      "Now I got you in my palm, you weak bastards."

      "Damn it! How do we suppose to get out?!"

      "Simple. You use hado while I use a trick?"

      "What kind of trick?"

      "You'll see."

      When the hollow was away, Dorian told Nari to use a Hado technique to destroy the floors. HE was pissed at the sight when he came back.

      "Looks like we're gonna get it if he find us."

      "I seriously ,in all hell, hope not."

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on Sun Aug 04, 2013 3:09 pm

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Hola, Dorian. I see you are almost done on your application. We have a rule, that every account has to have name of their primary account. Would you like to change it here, 'just click this sentence'

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on Mon Aug 05, 2013 6:58 am

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I'm so very sorry, but this app isn't ready for grading as it does not meet the minimum requirements for even our lowest grade. A paragraph is at least 5 sentences and you only have one for your appearance and personality, but you need at least two.

Please refer to the app grading standards
http://www.bleachstory.net/t4548-app-grading-standards

and then post again once you've edited this app to meet the requirements for your desired tier.

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on Tue Aug 06, 2013 5:15 am

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Appearance: 3
Personality: 2
History: 5
RP Sample: 3
Overall Quality: Some grammar and spelling errors throughout. Nothing in particular stands out as incredible. Approving for 4-3. I think you had the potential to receive higher tiers, but the personality was cut a bit short, and the sentences throughout are somewhat choppy and short.

Now I will grade your abilities and powers on a pass or fail basis.

Name: Inferno Regeneration
      Effect: Dorian can used his own fire to heal himself. The smaller the damage, the faster it goes. The bad side of it is that the heal requires a chunk of the user's reiatsu. Worse, if the damage is too great, regenerating takes all the spiritual power out of the user, making him fully healed but vulnerable.  

I'm not sure if Shinigami can have regeneration. I will look into that for you. Meanwhile, how about adding a post limit and cooldown? For example, he could regenerate minor injuries twice in a post, but must wait three posts to use it again.

Technique Name: Aohonō no Eikyō (Blue Flame Impact)
      Technique Description: Must wait 3 posts to use again. The technique creates a reiatsu feedback to the arms, creating a strong power spike to burn an opponent with a strike of blue fire.  

      Technique Effect Chart:

      *The effect chart is for damage, durability, or any other after effect of a technique. The damage/effect/etc will be based off of tiers.*

      Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower: The opponent hit by it will get fierce burns or damaged to a fatal state.
      Opponent is One Tier Lower: The damage will be less fatal.
      Opponent is Equal Tier: Both the opponent and Dorian will get burnt.
      Opponent is One Tier Higher: All damage goes to Dorian.
      Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher: Dorian will be fatally damaged.

     Technique Name: Ran Shokku (Turbulent Shock)
     Technique Description: Same like Aohonō no Eiykō, but uses lightning damage. Needs to wait 3 posts before using again.

     Technique Effect Chart:

     *The effect chart is for damage, durability, or any other after effect of a technique. The damage/effect/etc will be based off of tiers.*

     Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower: Electrocutes enemy to submission or to death.
     Opponent is One Tier Lower: Shocks most of the reiatsu of the opponent.
     Opponent is Equal Tier: Shocks both Dorian and the opponent.
     Opponent is One Tier Higher: Shocks Dorian's reiatsu to half.
     Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher: Stuns Dorian for 1 post.

There should be no death or fatal injury for one attack. Please take fix that. =]

Name: Enhanced Willpower
      Effect: Dorian now can take damage to increase spiritual power. The damage will be effective, but reiatsu will be used to lower the damage.

I don't think you quite understand the abilities and techniques system and what they really are. =] No worries, I'll help you.

An ability is something like...

Name: Kaze no shoheki
Effect: Bob can create a three-inch thick barrier of air around him when he releases Shikai. That barrier cannot be broken unless Bob stop moving, meaning that he must be in motion for it to take effect. To maintain the barrier, Bob has a 'price' of reiatsu. The longer he holds the barrier, the more it eats up his reiatsu, making him possibly weaker and more vulnerable.

That is the ability. Now the techniques are what you can do with that ability.

Technique Name: Kyofu no Itami
Technique Description: Kyofu No Itami gives Bob's physical hits, such as punches and kicks, more force by help of the wind barrier. She can use three hits per post, and use the technique for two posts. It requires a three post cooldown.

Do you see? The techniques are based off of the ability. Here is the site's explanation of a technique and ability:

Techniques are not extra abilities, but rather, skills which use your abilities in more extreme forms beyond their basic use. For example... let's say I can shoot fire from my fingers. A technique might be gathering a whole bunch of fire for a few minutes and then shooting a fire-laser from my fingers, doing much more damage than what my ability normally would on it's own. Other special or basic techniques using your normal control over your spiritual energy can also be added here, like adding reiatsu to your punches to inflict more damage, and things like that. Think of abilities as special powers - and think of techniques as moves which use the powers you already have.

Moving on.

Spoiler:

Bankai!

Bankai Name: Eien no honō Furaingukyōki
Bankai Release Phrase: Time to drop it, Eien no hono Furaingukyōki
Bankai Appearance: The zanpakuto now infuses with Dorian and he grew phoenix wings on his back and wields dragon gauntlets on both arms. The zanpakuto still remains the same.
Bankai Ability: (Limit of 1) (What is your Bankai's Ability? Is it an enhancement of the Shikai ability or a whole new one?)

Ability Name: Expanded Reiatsu
Ability Description: Dorian's spiritual power heightens by half of his health. He only has 15 minutes to use it before the effects comatose the user.

Bankai Techniques: Limit 6

   Technique Name: Burūbādoreiji (Bluebird Rage)
   Technique Description: Dorian uses his wings to create burning winds to blow away with massive force. Need 6 posts to use again.

Technique Effect Chart:

*The effect chart is for damage, durability, or any other after effect of a technique. The damage/effect/etc will be based off of tiers.*

Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower: Impact can cause deathly internal damage as well as physical damage.
Opponent is One Tier Lower: Internal damage softens.
Opponent is Equal Tier: Only external damage occurs.
Opponent is One Tier Higher: Both the opponent and Dorian get caught.
Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher: The technique backlashes at Dorian.

    Technique Name: Kaminari no yōna hittochēn (Thunderous hit chain)
    Technique Description: A melee only technique that starts a chain of kicks and punchs that lasts 5 seconds. 6 posts until technique is used again.


    Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower: Opponent's bones gets ruptured and knocked out for 1 post.
    Opponent is One Tier Lower: Opponent's bones gets ruptured.
    Opponent is Equal Tier: Gets 1 hit on opponents.
    Opponent is One Tier Higher:Opponent dodges all attacks.
    Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher: Opponent dodges all attacks and damaged right lung takes effect and lowers spiritual power.

Unless you reach a tier of 3-1 or higher, you cannot have a Bankai. Please remove this.

I believe that is it. I hope I didn't miss anything. Please fix those and bump this thread. =] If you have questions, don't hesitate to ask.

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on Wed Aug 07, 2013 5:43 am

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Please continue your grading of this application thus far. Looking good. Just make sure you double check and triple check to insure that you don't miss anything.

Note for Dorian: You need to use the code at the bottom of the shinigami template and paste it into here and then fill it out. I will fix the code so that you can do so.

on Sat Aug 10, 2013 10:00 pm

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I see you've finished editing. =] There are just a few more things that need a check upon before I can approve this bio.

Technique Name:Mugen Shōtotsu (Infinite Collision)
Technique Description:A charge attack that uses blue flames as an acceleration burst. 5 posts until another use.
Technique Effect Chart:

*The effect chart is for damage, durability, or any other after effect of a technique. The damage/effect/etc will be based off of tiers.*

Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower:Stab the opponent in a critical manner. Causes 25% damage.
Opponent is One Tier Lower:A stab to one of the opponent's limbs. Causes 10% of damage.
Opponent is Equal Tier:Dorian misses.
Opponent is One Tier Higher:The opponent hits you blindly.
Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher:The move causes you to trip and the opponent hits you in the critical point and stunned for 1 post.
I noticed that you put on equal tier, "Dorian Misses". Please note that even on lower tiers, enemies can still dodge attacks. Also, I don't think you are quite getting the effect chart. ^^

The effect chart simply states what happens. Just because you hit an opponent doesn't mean that you will get hurt.

Here is an example:
example technique:
Technique Name:
Kyōfū no itami

Technique Description:
The ability, Kyofu No Itami gives Tori's physical hits, such as punches and kicks, more force by help of the wind barrier. She can use three hits per post, and use the technique for two posts. It requires a three post cooldown.

Technique Effect Chart:

Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower: Bruises, possible internal damage or broken bones.
Opponent is One Tier Lower: Major bruises and possible slight internal damage.
Opponent is Equal Tier: Major bruises/sprains.
Opponent is One Tier Higher: Bruises
Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher: Minimal pain.

Let's say you successfully sliced an opponent with a sword. The effect would be "a large gash". That is all the effect chart needs. =] It doesn't need damage estimates, but simply what happens when the attack successfully lands. Please fix that up on all your techniques, and I think you'll be good. ^.^ Bump this thread once you've finished editing!

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on Sat Aug 10, 2013 11:33 pm

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I'd also like to point out a problem with your history. You got hit by a hollow and then randomly stabbed which somehow put you in a 3 month coma before you woke up as a shinigami. There are some problems with this.

-Transferring shinigami powers to humans is forbidden. Even if it was an accident you wouldn't be allowed to keep the powers.

-A medic would not have sat around and taken care of you for 3 months in a random cabin. They have more important things to do. Your memories would have been wiped and your spiritual powers removed.

-Substitute Shinigami aren't so easily accepted. Ichigo had to save all of soul society before he got his badge.

If you really want to be a substitute shinigami, then please gain that trust IC. You'll start as someone with "shinigami powers" but not recognized as a shinigami yet. This means you wont have access to soul society and will be starting out living in the human world. Make sense?

So please change the end of your history. Perhaps the shinigami transfers their powers because they've already been defeated. Then you kill the hollow but the shinigami dies of their wounds. This leaves you open for some great character development as you wouldn't even know about soul society yet, or anything about your new powers really.

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on Sun Aug 11, 2013 4:44 am

Editing is completed. Ready for grading.

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on Sun Aug 11, 2013 4:54 am

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All you need to do now is remove the percentages from your tier comparison charts. Remove those and we can get you approved and on your way!

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on Sun Aug 11, 2013 4:58 am

Removed percentage. FINALLY ready for grading.

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