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#1 Hikaru Shibata (rework with new template) on Tue May 07, 2013 11:50 am

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Identity of a Soul
Name: Hikaru Shibata
Alias: N/A
Age: 574
Age of Appearance: 27

Gender: Male
Race/Species: Vizard

What Makes a 'Person'
Appearance: Hikaru is 6'3" tall and weighs around 150 pounds.  He has long, red hair that he keeps in a braid down his back.  The hair comes to an end around the small of his back. As you look at his face you can see he is has taken good care of it.  He has round, red eyes that are centered perfectly on his face, an average sized nose, and normal mouth that, when he smiles, shows his beautiful white teeth.  If one were to look closely it may look like he has a pair of teeth that are almost canine like in nature.  His cheeks are not too chubby and he normally does not have any facial hair.  If he did this also would be red in color. His lips are average and reddish in color, making them look very kissable.  His skin is soft to touch and white in color as well with touches of pink in places.  

He has a muscular chest that makes him look like he works out.  Some would say a six pack abs.  His arms are not to long and are well toned, also making him look like he works out.  This mostly comes from the years of sword training that he's had.  His legs are not to long, but lean and muscular as well.  This shows that he has a very fit body all around.

Spoiler:

Style/Clothing: Hikaru is the type of person who does not really care what he wears.  For the most part, when not wearing his shinigami uniform he wears a pair of black pants that comes up to his waist.  A black belt is normally around his waist to help hold up his pants, not that they need much help due to how form fitting they normally are.  On his pants is a silver chain that leads to his back pocket.  Attached to the other side of the chain is his wallet.  His pants go down the length of his legs and end at his shoes.  He wears a plain pair of black high tops that look generic in all ways.  No markings can be seen of the maker of the shoe and it they normally don’t look worn out or faded.  For his top he wears a loose fitting, all black shirt with short sleeves.  No real markings are on the shirt as he prefers it to just be plain.  

When it is colder outside he’ll wear a leather jacket that covers his arms, wraps around his body, and flows all the way down to the ground.  It does, however, leave room for him to walk and not be torn or ripped from walking.  His regular clothing is able to change to be a bit looser if needed should he get into a fight.  The clothing is also flame retardant and does allow for him to vent his temper easily, especially should he surround himself with fire if angered enough.

Hikaru's Shinigami uniform is the same as most would wear.  His top is sleeveless and black with white trim around it.  He wears the traditional back pants that fit him loosely and has a white sash around his waist where his zanpakuto lies.  When it is colder outside he'll wear a long black coat make out of a material similar to the regular outfit, but made for colder tempratures.  

Tattoo's/Scars/Etc:None

Personality: Hikaru is a very temperamental person. He normally is easily angered, but it takes time for him to build up to a full, uncontrolled anger.  He has learned to control his anger over time, but still has his moments, especially when he gets into it with his hollow side. He tends to stay away from associating with his hollow side if possible due to how much it normally affects his personal life.

Most of the time he is a friendly person. He would not hurt anyone and tends to treat women, children, elders, and those with higher rank with respect and kindness, helping them out first during any situation.  When he was raised by his adoptive parents he was taught how to be a gentleman and how to treat those around him.  He didn’t like the training at the time but has since learned how important it was and is happy to follow through with the training.  He tries to make friends quickly from anyone he does not feel is there to harm him, though he can be somewhat shy when he first approaches someone.  

Hikaru will stick up for what is right and tends to be angered easily if he sees any mistreatment of anyone who he is around, no matter if they are enemy or friend.  He is never in a rush and will stop to help anytime he can and will even volunteer for a task if needed.  He feels that this may be a fault of his due to the fact that at times he will promise to help out one person and then at the same time promise to help another during that same time period, often stretching himself thin when it comes to helping others.

Hikaru is very loyal to anyone he considers a friend; much like a dog would be loyal to his master.  He feels that once a person becomes your friend that they are your friend for life, not just for a moment.  

Fighting Style: Hikaru mostly is a long range combat fighter, mostly using his flames if he can.  He will fight in close combat if needed and sometimes does when it comes to some of his attacks using his scythe.

(For Likes, Dislikes, Ambitions, etc, go for 1-3 sentences per point, more if you wish.)
Likes:

  • Hikaru likes all the friends he has and he loves to make new friends.  He may be a bit shy at first, but he is always very friendly to anyone he meets.



  • Hikaru is a big fan of fire, this being his main element.  Due to liking fire he also loves the summer and the heat it brings.



  • Hikaru is a big fan of wolves and tigers.  He plans to one day have an enclosure or a preserve that he can have wolves and tigers run around in.



  • Hikaru likes to take long strolls through the forest.  He finds this relaxing as he meets many animals along his walk.



  • Hikaru also like to help people.  He may go out of his way to help them if he has the time to do so.




Dislikes:

  • Hikaru hates the fact that he was betrayed by his former captain.  He wishes he could get revenge for what was done but knows that can never happen.



  • Hikaru hates how some men treat women and children.  He’s a bit old fashioned in that sense.  It’s how he was raised when he was adopted by the Shibatas.



  • Hikaru hates to have animals mistreated before him.  He is a nature lover and prefers for any animal to be treated with respect and kindness.



  • Hikaru also hate to be caged up.  He loves to be free and be himself.  His greatest fear is to be locked behind bars for something his hollow did.



  • Hikaru also greatly dislikes his hollow side.  He hates the day he became a vizard and would like nothing more than to become a normal Shinigami once more.




Ambitions/Dreams/Goals:

  • Hikaru wants to one day be rid of his hollow side and be a normal Shinigami once more.



  • Hikaru dreams of one day seeing his family again.



  • Hikaru one day strives to become a captain should the Soul Society one day reform.



  • Hikaru dreams of a world where all people are treated fairly no matter if they are male, female, young, old, or animal.



  • Hikaru wants to one day not have to worry about controlling his Temper.  He also does not like this part of him and would like to be rid of it.




Strengths:

  • Hikaru, being a fire elemental user, is strong against fire.  He will take no damage from fire attack except from those 2 or more tiers above him.



  • Hikaru is very protective of his friends and family and will do anything for them.



  • Hikaru can easily make friends with wolves weather wild or captive



  • Hikaru can make friends easily and can trust people without question unless he knows right off the bad they will cause him harm due to who he is.



  •  Hikaru is a master chief, though he does not look like it.  He can take a few ingredients and make food for over 100 people if the need arises.




Fears & Weaknesses:

  • Hikaru fears loosing his family forever and never seeing them again.  He’s already lost them, but he hopes not forever.



  • Hikaru is elementally weak against water attacks.  He will take 25% to 50% more damage from these types of attacks



  • Hikaru fears begin alone in the world with no friends or family.



  • Hikaru is elementally weak against ice.  He will take 25% to 50% more damage from these types of attacks.



  • Hikaru fears loosing his home and his livelihood.  He wants to stay in the Soul Society even though he is a visored.



  •  Hikaru’s greatest fear is that Ignado, his hollow side, will fully take over him and that he, Hikaru, will never regain control from him.




Gene's of a Race

Shinigami & Vizard Specifics


List of 'Known' Skills:


  • Shunpo



  • Basic Reiatsu Detection



  • *If more need to be added let a Mod/Admin know*
Division: Division 5
Rank: Vice Captain
Shinigami Uniform: Hikaru wears the traditional uniform except for his top is sleevless.  He prefers this due to the flexability he has in moving his arms.  The legs of his pants are a bit loose which allows for him to move swiftly if needed and be able to kick freely.
Spoiler:
Haori Appearance: Hikaru does not have one yet as he's not obtained Bankai nor a Captain level.



A Shinigami's Partner






  • Zanpakuto Name: Ken, The Wolf of Misery
    Zanpakuto Spirit Appearance & Personality:
    Ken’s beast form
    Spoiler:
    Ken’s human form
    Spoiler:
    Ken normal form is that of a very large wolf who seems to be made of fire.  He’s a sweet and kind person who works to keep Ignado in check.  He mostly keeps to his wolf form as he does not feel comfortable in human form.  He’s mostly in human form when he needs to talk with Hikaru and Ignado as this is the only form that Ignado will pay attention to him or Hikaru.  
    Zanpakuto Inner World: (What does your characters inner world look like?)
    Spoiler:
    Hikaru's inner world is a long stretching desert with large rocks around the area.  Off in the distance it looks like there is a raging fire.  You can walk for days trying to reach this fire and it will still seem like it’s very far away.  The sand is soft to the touch and, surprisingly, white in color.  The rocks are grayish in color and range from the size of a beach ball to the size of a small house.  There are also sand dunes everywhere and the sky seems a bit overcast.  Though you are standing in the middle of a desert you don't feel either overly hot or overly cold.  The temperature is just right.
    Sealed Zanpakuto Appearance: (What does your characters sealed zanpakuto look like?)
    Spoiler:
    Hikarkus Zanpakuto looks like a normal broadsword at first.  It is 26 inches in length, has a red hilt.  The decoration on the sword looks like a half circle sitting on a line.  This is the bronze in color and has a red jewel in the middle.  It is from this jewel that the flames his sword is covered in come from.  The flame does not burn Hikaru as he touches it but can burn someone should he cut them with it.  Minor burns are suffered near the area cut for those in tiers above Hikaru, 1st degree burns from the area cut for those in an equal tier with him, and 2nd degree burns from the area cut for those in tiers below him
    Elemental Affinity: Fire and Darkness



    A Shinigami's General Skills






  • General Techniques: (These are moves your character was taught or trained and developed on their own. They are things anyone would be able to learn and perform unless they are dependent on your unique race or abilities. Examples are custom shunpo variations, hakuda/zanjutsu techniques, and using your reiatsu on an object to simulate telekinesis.) These are not used for extra shikai or bankai techniques, elemental techniques, extra abilities and powers. Limit 4.




      Technique Name:   None that I am aware of







  • Personal Abilities: (These are traits your character was either born with or attained through special circumstances. They cannot be taught to or learned by others. Examples would be fire elemental reiatsu, unnaturally sharp reiatsu sensing, and genetic mutations.) Limit 3




      Ability Name:  The Temper (as he calls it)Ability Description:  If Hikaru is angered he will start off by trying to relax. If he is continuously angered he will become surrounded by flames. He then will just randomly attack anyone around with little to no control over whom he attacks or what he attacks with. If, while he is in this state, his hollow takes control then he goes wild and his attacks become more powerful. Hikaru has become better at gaining control once he begins, though, it does take time. He also knows what normally triggers him to get this way so he works to avoid those triggers at all costs. Hikaru, for the most part, won't really use this since he mainly avoids everything that would trigger attacks. It takes about 3 posts of being around one of his triggers to charge. Cool down is normally 5 posts to come out of the Temper and 7 posts before he attacks again, if angered. When The Temper starts, it gives Hikaru a +1 AR boost. When his hollow takes control he gets a +1AR boost but can only use the Temper for 5 posts.  At the end fo the 5th post he is so exhausted that he suffers -1 AR for 1 post and is not able to use this attack for the rest of the thread.Things that trigger Hikaur's Temper:

      • Hikaru holds high respect for children, women, the elderly, and animals.  If he sees anyone abusing any of those mentioned that is his trigger.

      • Hikaru can not stand to see people arguing.  If he sees this he'll walk away.  If he's caught in it, he will stay but do his best to control his temper.  This is another trigger.

      • The final trigger is Large Puddles of Water.  This could be puddles of water that form from rain on up to ponds, lakes, and even the ocean.  A river can be counted in this as well.  He'll tolorate rain, but not for long either, about an additional 2 posts.


      A Shinigami's Shikai

    • Shikai Name:  Ken, The Wolf Of Misery
      Shikai Release Phrase:  Rise from the ashes and torch our enemies, Wolf of Misery, Ken!
      Shikai Appearance:  
      Spoiler:
      Hikaru is surrounded by fire after he calls out his Shikai command.  When the fire clears he stands before you wearing a pair of loose fitting brown pants and no shirt.  He his wearing a tattered red cape and is holding a scythe in his right hand.  The scythe in the picture is what he uses. The blade of the scythe is made of flame.  The blade extends from the staff for about three feet before ending in a very sharp point.  The staff part of the scythe itself is about 7 feet in height and looks to be made of  wood.  The wood is very sturdy and will not break easily when hit by someone of lower or equal tier.  Those of higher tier and strength may be able to break the pole a bit easier, but will still be somewhat hard to break.  The wood of the staff is also made to withstand high temperatures.
      Shikai Ability:




        Ability Name:  Does not have oneAbility Description: Hikaru's Shikai gives him the ability to use Flare Sniper Blast outside of Shikai, allowing him to get an edge on a battle. His sword, before he uses Shikai, is normally covered in flames as well.







    • Shikai Techniques: Limit 6




        Technique Name:  Flare Sniper BlastTechnique Description: As the name suggests the attack is best used when Hikaru is not to close to his enemy or his enemies attack.  Hikaru raises his hand and gathers energy in the palm of his hand. He then uses this energy to send out a barrage of fire balls towards his enemy's attack that was directed at a friend or companion whom the enemy is attacking. The attack can also be directed at the enemy as well.  There could be anywhere between 10 to 25 fire balls. The more fire balls that he creates, the weaker the attack. Hikaru will mainly use this attack if he is able to catch his enemy off guard as a first attack. This attack is more of a defensive attack but can be used offensively if able to catch an enemy off guard. There is no wait to use the attack but Hikaru is not able to use the attack for the rest of the battle due to this attack working best when the enemy is not aware of him. If is does wish to use this attack again during battle there is a 3 post cool down.  With Ignado in control or using his influence on him is when Flare Sniper Blast takes on a dark aura.Technique Effect Chart:*The effect chart is for damage, durability, or any other after effect of a technique. The damage/effect/etc will be based off of tiers.*Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower:  Those two or more tiers lower that Hikaru will find it difficult to avoid this attack if used offensively.  If it hits it will cause clothing to burn and severe burning of the skin. If used in the middle of a battle the enemy picks up a slight advantage and is able to dodge the attack better than when it was unknown to the enemy he was using it.  As the name implies it is best used when the enemy does not know he’s there as he uses this attack as a sniper would.   If this attack is used defensively and the enemy does not know Hikaru is there, there is a good chance the enemies attack will be negated.  If the enemy knows, There is a decent chance the attack will be negated depending on the strength of the enemies attack.  If hit when Ignado is in control, the dark aura will cause the enemy to become depressed and not wish to attack.  This will last for 4 posts and then the enemy will return to normal.  The depression will lessen slightly with each post.Opponent is One Tier Lower:  Those one tier lower that Hikaru will find it semi-difficult to avoid this attack if used offensively.  If it hits it will cause clothing to burn and moderate to severe burning of the skin. If used in the middle of a battle the enemy picks up a slight advantage and is able to dodge the attack better than when it was unknown to the enemy he was using it.  As the name implies it is best used when the enemy does not know he’s there as a sniper would.   If this attack is used defensively and the enemy does not know Hikaru is there is a decent chance the enemies attack will be negated.  If the enemy knows, There is a semi-decent chance the attack will be negated depending on the strength of the enemies attack.  If hit when Ignado is in control, the dark aura will cause the enemy to become depressed and not wish to attack.  This will last for 3 posts and then the enemy will return to normal.  The depression will lessen slightly with each post.Opponent is Equal Tier:  Those in an equal in tier to Hikaru will find it a little difficult to avoid this attack if used offensively.  If it hits it will cause clothing to burn and moderate burning of the skin. If used in the middle of a battle the enemy picks up a slight advantage and is able to dodge the attack better than when it was unknown to the enemy he was using it.  As the name implies it is best used when the enemy does not know he’s there as a sniper would.   If this attack is used defensively and the enemy does not know Hikaru is there is a decent chance the enemies attack will be negated.  If the enemy knows, There is a slightly decent chance the attack will be negated depending on the strength of the enemies attack.  If hit when Ignado is in control, the dark aura will cause the enemy to become depressed and not wish to attack.  This will last for 2 posts and then the enemy will return to normal.  The depression will lessen slightly with each post.Opponent is One Tier Higher: Those in one tier above Hikaru will find a slight chance to avoid this attack if used offensively.  If it hits it will cause clothing to burn and light to moderate burning of the skin. If used in the middle of a battle the enemy picks up a slight advantage and is able to dodge the attack better than when it was unknown to the enemy he was using it.  As the name implies it is best used when the enemy does not know he’s there as a sniper would.   If this attack is used defensively and the enemy does not know Hikaru is there is a decent chance the enemies attack will be negated.  If the enemy knows, There is a slightly decent chance the attack will be negated depending on the strength of the enemies attack.  If hit when Ignado is in control, the dark aura will cause the enemy to become depressed and not wish to attack.  This will last for 1 post and then the enemy will return to normal.  The depression will lessen slightly with each post.Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher:  Those in two or more tiers above Hikaru will have a good chance avoid this attack if used offensively.  If it hits it will cause clothing to burn and light burning of the skin. If used in the middle of a battle the enemy picks up a slight advantage and is able to dodge the attack better than when it was unknown to the enemy he was using it.  As the name implies it is best used when the enemy does not know he’s there as a sniper would.   If this attack is used defensively and the enemy does not know Hikaru is there is a decent chance the enemies attack will be negated.  If the enemy knows, there is a slim chance the attack will be negated depending on the strength of the enemies attack.  It may, however, lessen the attack if used at just the right time.  If hit when Ignado is in control, the dark aura will cause the enemy to become depressed and not wish to attack.  This will last for 1 post and then the enemy will return to normal.  The depression will lessen slightly with each post.Technique Name:  Flame ArrowTechnique Description:  The blade on Hikaru’s Scythe disappears and the stick shortens a bit. He then holds it like one would an archer’s bow. A string made of fire forms between the two ends. As he draws back the string an arrow will form. For every AR point of control he has above the person this attack will allow for one more arrow to be formed. At 0 AR and below he will still form 1 arrow.  Once the arrow(s) are fired he is able to control where it goes within a 50 foot radius for 2 posts. There a 1 post charge to account for the time to change the scythe to the bow used to fire the arrows. After a 2 post cool down, and if he has not changed back to using his scythe, there is no charge to use the attack again.Technique Effect Chart:*The effect chart is for damage, durability, or any other after effect of a technique. The damage/effect/etc will be based off of tiers.*Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower:  The arrow(s) has almost no chance that the will miss. If it hits it can cause a deep scratch and pierce the skin, causing a wound where the arrow hit. It also causes clothing to catch fire. The damage to the skin from the fire is second degree burns with some first degree burns further from where the arrow hit the person.Opponent is One Tier Lower:  Hikaru the arrow(s) have a  small chance that the will miss. If it hits it can cause a deep scratch and pierce the skin, causing a wound where the arrow hit. It also causes clothing to catch fire. The damage to the skin from the fire is a few second degree burns with some first degree burns further from where the arrow hit the person.Opponent is Equal Tier:  The arrow(s) have a small chance that they will miss. If it hits it can scratch and pierce the skin, causing as small wound. It also causes the clothing to catch fire. The damage to the skin from the fire is first degree burns.Opponent is One Tier Higher:  the arrow(s) have a general chance that they will miss. If it hits it can scratch and pierce the skin, causing as small wound. It also causes the clothing to catch fire. The damage to the skin from the fire is a few first degree burns and a few minor burns further from where the arrow hit the person.Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher:  the arrow(s) have a decent chance that they will miss. If it hits it can scratch the skin and catch clothing on fire. There would be minimal burn damage to skin from the burning clothing.Technique Name:  Ruby LightningTechnique Description: The blade on Hikaru’s Scythe disappears and the stick shortens a bit. He then swings the newly formed bow around. In the center forms a red ball of light. He releases the ball by calling out the name of the attack. It then shots out like lighting and can strike any enemy's in a 50 mile radius. There a 1 post charge to account for the time to change the scythe to the bow. After a 2 post cool down, and if he has not changed back to using his scythe, there is no charge to use the attack again.Technique Effect Chart:*The effect chart is for damage, durability, or any other after effect of a technique. The damage/effect/etc will be based off of tiers.*Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower:  The lightning has almost no chance that the will miss If it hits it can shock a person. It feels like a strong electric shock. It will also leave scorch marks where the lightning hits. The damage to the skin is some first degree burn and a few second degree burns where the lightning hit.Opponent is One Tier Lower:  The lightning has a small chance that the will miss. If it hits it can shock a person. It feels like a strong electric shock. It will also leave scorch marks where the lightning hits. The damage to the skin is some first degree burns where the lightning hit.Opponent is Equal Tier:  The lightning has a medium chance that it will miss. If it hits it can shock a person. It feels like a weak electric shock. It will also leave scorch marks where the lightning hits. The damage to the skin is a small burn where the lightning hit.Opponent is One Tier Higher:  The lightning has a good chance that it will miss. If it hits it can shock a person. It feels like a weak electric shock. It will also leave scorch marks where the lightning hits. The damage to the skin is a small burn where the lightning hit.Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher:  The lighting has a great chance that it will miss. If it hits it can shock a person, but it would feel more like the shock you get from static electricity. It will also leave a scorch mark where the lightning hits.Technique Name:  Blazing TornadoTechnique Description: Hikaru's scythe has to have the blade on it and it has to be a sunny day for Hikaru to use this attack.  Hikaru draws from the rays of the sun shining down to the blade on his scythe.  Once he has enough energy from this a giant ball of fire can be seen at the end of his scythe.  He then swipes the scythe, causing a tornado made of flame to form.  The tornado can travel anywhere in a 50 foot radius and can attack friend or foe alike if they are in the way of the attack.  Hikaru has no control over the tornado once released and can even be attacked himself.  This attack charges for one post and the tornado lasts for 3 posts unless the sun is blocked out or the sun sets.Technique Effect Chart:*The effect chart is for damage, durability, or any other after effect of a technique. The damage/effect/etc will be based off of tiers.*Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower:  Should a person be hit by the Blazing Tornado they can suffer 2nd degree burns from burning clothing.Opponent is One Tier Lower: Should a person be hit by the Blazing Tornado they can suffer 1st degree burns from burning clothing.Opponent is Equal Tier: Should a person be hit by the Blazing Tornado they can suffer moderate to light burns from burning clothing.Opponent is One Tier Higher:  Should a person be hit by the Blazing Tornado they can suffer light burns from burning clothing.Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher:  Should a person be hit by the Blazing Tornado they can suffer almost no burns from burning clothing.Technique Name:  Darkened Ruby TyphoonTechnique Description:  Hikaru sticks his scythe into the ground and crosses his arms in front of him.  He then begins to draw energy around his hands.  As he draws more energy he brings his arms up and begins to uncross them.  He then calls out the name of the attack and first lowers his right hand, bringing it back up again to send the attack.  He does the same with is left hand and this causes two waves of black and ruby colored fire to shoot right at the enemy. Hikaru is not able to control the direction the flames travel in as they will only move forward from where he is standing.  The flames are only able to travel about 50 feet before slowly dying away at 100 feet.  The further away the person is from where Hikaru is standing, the less damage the person will take.  Those who are between 1 and 50 feet away will take full force of the attack.  Those at 75 feet away will have a greater chance to dodge and will take half the damage.  Those at 100 feet away will be able to completely dodge the attack and will take no damage at all.  Once the flames wrap around the enemy he will use this moment to attack using one of his other attacks.  These attacks get a +1AR boost if the person is being held with this attack.Technique Effect Chart:*The effect chart is for damage, durability, or any other after effect of a technique. The damage/effect/etc will be based off of tiers.*Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower:  The attack will wrap around them and hold the person in place, causing sever burns to the body where the flame touches.  The effect is lessened the further away a person is from Hikaru after 50 feet and up to 100 feet.Opponent is One Tier Lower:  The attack will wrap around them and hold the person in place causing moderate to sever burns to the body where the flame touches.  The effect is lessened the further away a person is from Hikaru after 50 feet and up to 100 feet.Opponent is Equal Tier:  The attack will wrap around them and hold the person in place causing moderate burns to the body where the flame touches.  The effect is lessened the further away a person is from Hikaru after 50 feet and up to 100 feet.Opponent is One Tier Higher:  The attack will wrap around them and hold the person in place causing light to moderate burns to the body where the flame touches.  The effect is lessened the further away a person is from Hikaru after 50 feet and up to 100 feet.Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher:  The attack will wrap around them and hold the person in place causing light burns to the body where the flame touches.  The effect is lessened the further away a person is from Hikaru after 50 feet and up to 100 feet.







      A Vizards Hollow Half






    • (Note: Even though it is listed here I do wish to note that Hikaru keeps his hollow hidden and does not ever really use it.  Untill allowed he will not make mention of him and work to keep this a secret since he is based in the Soul Society.  This will be untill the plot allows for him to begin mentioning it.)



    • Inner Hollow Appearance:  
      Spoiler:
      Hikaru's inner hollow, Ignado, is just as tall as he is.  He has short, flaming red hair and bright, ruby red eyes.  His red hair is spiky and a bit long.  His nose and eyes are all you can see if his face as he keeps this covered with a white scarf.  He wears a long sleeved black shirt and a pair of form fitting pants that are also black.  He is wearing black, calf high boots and has a belt around the middle that ties in a knot and flows out on either side of where it is tied.  Like Hikaru, Ignado has the ability to control fire and wields a sword similar to the one Hikaru wields.
      Mask Appearance:
      Spoiler:
      Hikers mask is pure white except for around the eye and the ears of the mask.  Around the eyes is a ring of red and the ears are pure red.  His mask looks like a wolf's face with the ears pointing up and ending at a point.  There are no markings on the muzzle of the wolf's face on the mask.
      Mask Duration:  He does not like to use it.  He has, however, been able to gain Average mastery of its use.  Lasts for 4 posts.  He has a cool down of 4 posts at the most.
      Mask Techniques: Limit 4 (These will be things like Bala, Cero, Sonido, or your own variants or even knew techs altogether.) Vizards do not get Hierro, Gran Rey Cero, High-Speed Regen, or Pesquisa.




        Technique Name:  GargantaTechnique Description: A Garganta literally tears open the dimensional fabric separating the worlds, revealing a tunnel of whirling, torrential energy that must be focused and solidified to create a discernible pathway. It is primarily used by Hollow and Arrancar, but some other characters have used it through different means.[C&P from Bleach Wiki]This is something Hikaru learned while in Hueco Mundo. He is able to use it well enough, though, for known reasons, prefers not to.Technique Effect Chart:*The effect chart is for damage, durability, or any other after effect of a technique. The damage/effect/etc will be based off of tiers.*None, this is a passive tech.Technique Name:  CeroTechnique Description:   A ruby red colored cero, besides the color there is no variation in the power or speed of the cero. Cool down is two posts.Technique Effect Chart:*The effect chart is for damage, durability, or any other after effect of a technique. The damage/effect/etc will be based off of tiers.*Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower:  Can take out limbs and make a large hole in the person, but will not kill themOpponent is One Tier Lower:  Can take out a limb or make a good sized hole in the person, but not life threatening.Opponent is Equal Tier:  Can make a good sized hole in a person but will not cause loss of limb.Opponent is One Tier Higher:  Can cause a hole in a person, but will not do much more damage other than put hole in clothing.Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher:  Causes light damage from the attack.Technique Name:  Fire CeroTechnique Description: A cero that is created from the heat particles that are in the air.  He draws in the heat and creates the Cero using this.  Besides the normal damage that can be caused by a Cero, a person could get burned.Technique Effect Chart:*The effect chart is for damage, durability, or any other after effect of a technique. The damage/effect/etc will be based off of tiers.*Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower:  Can take out limbs and make a large hole in the person, but will not kill them.  Will also cause moderate burns to the body where the attack hit.Opponent is One Tier Lower:  Can take out a limb or make a good sized hole in the person, but not life threatening.  Will also cause light to moderate burns to the body where the attack hit.Opponent is Equal Tier:  Can make a good sized hole in a person but will not cause loss of limb.  Will also cause light burns to the body where the attack hit.Opponent is One Tier Higher:  Can cause a hole in a person, but will not do much more damage other than put hole in clothing and burn it from where the attack hit.Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher:  Causes light damage from the attack and burns to clothing from where the attack hit.Technique Name:  Dark CeroTechnique Description: A Cero created using the darkness in Hikaru’s heart.  It is a normal Cero, but black in color and surrounded by black ribbons of energy.Technique Effect Chart:*The effect chart is for damage, durability, or any other after effect of a technique. The damage/effect/etc will be based off of tiers.*Opponent is Two+ Tiers Lower:  Can take out limbs and make a large hole in the person, but will not kill them.  Will cause the person to become depressed for 5 posts.Opponent is One Tier Lower:  Can take out a limb or make a good sized hole in the person, but not life threatening.  Will cause the person to become depressed for 4 posts.Opponent is Equal Tier:  Can make a good sized hole in a person but will not cause loss of limb.  Will cause the person to become depressed for 3 posts.Opponent is One Tier Higher:  Can cause a hole in a person, but will not do much more damage other than put hole in clothing.  Will cause the person to become depressed for 2 posts.Opponent is Two+ Tiers Higher:  Causes light damage from the attack.  Will cause the person to become depressed for 1 post.







      A Shinigami's Kido Skills






    • Bakudo: Limit 10. Left over slots can be applied to Hado.




        SaiHainawaSekiGekiHorinShitotsu SansenEnkosenRikujokoroGochutekkanNoren Mekuri







    • Hado: Limit 10. Left over slots can be applied to Bakudo.




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    The Past, The Present, The Future.. What is Your History?

    History:


    A/N: All Cannon references in this history took place in the cannon world. He was thrust into the AU world unknowingly one day and just lived his like peacefully thereafter. (the thrust was shortly before we resumed the history bit.)

    Hikaru was born in the Soul Society.  Even when he was a baby he's always had an ugly temper. It is due to this temper that he has been passed around from one family to the next. Sometimes he would fall into a family where there was abuse. He would fight back and be moved on due to what they called "The Temper."(see personal abilities)


    He did end up at one point with one family where he stayed for quite a long time. The Shibata family. Hikaru never really knew his last name as his family didn't want him to have it. The Shibata family taught him a little how to control his anger and helped him to control his ability better when angry. Due to this Hikaru took Shibata as his last name. The also taught him life in high society and how toe behave around those who are lower in rank than him, or higher in rank than him.  This is where he learned his respect for women, children, and the elderly.  It was also around this time that he began to see Ken in dreams he would have.  Most of the time Hikaru would write this off as a dream since he was not fully aware of Shinigami and what they did.  The Shibata's were not really a family that had many Shinigami in them and, any time he would tell them about his dream they would tell him that it was that, only a dream.


    After about 20 years of living with them he left the Shibata family. He didn't want to continue to be a burden on them. He knew it was hard for them to have someone living with them with a bad temper like his. He also was somewhat not pleased with the way he was acting around people who were not as lucky as him to end up living with someone who was rich.  So, he went out on his own and scavenged around for what he needed. Most of the time, though, people just gave him what he wanted for fear of his temper.  The Shibata's, mainly Mr. Shibata, kept trying to find him.  Whenever they would meet, Hikaru would run off before they could talk.  He really did not want to live that life any more.


    It was while he was with the Shibata’s that he meet someone.  Here name was Sara and she was a friend he made who was part of another rich family.  His parents and her parents wanted them to get married.  This was part of the reason that Hikaru left the Shibata house.  Sara was in love with Jon, someone who was not rich.  Hikaru and Sara did date a few times and, just to try it, did kiss.  Hikaru was not happy and neither was Sara.  That was when he ran away.  Eventually Sara and Jon got married.  Hikaru was there as Jon’s best man.  He was even there when their first child, Rha’ Chonchiyo.  Hikaru eventually became his godfather.


    Eight years after Rha was born, another small miracle came to Sara and Jon.  Sara’s family didn’t like it so the hid her away, Reyna Chonchiyo.   Hikaru had graduated from the academy by this time.  He had been hard at work the night before and had accidentally slept in.  He had wanted to visit with Jon, Sara, and family.  Both Jon and Sara stated that they had something they wanted to share with him and Rha.  Upon his approach he saw the house was on fire and being attack by Hollows.  He hurried to control the fire and kill the hollows.  He was too late to save Sara and Jon, but he did manage to save Rha.  He took Rha to a hospital to get healed but Rha, in the middle of the night, took off to look for his parents.  Hikaru never found him to long after he had grown up.


    One day he was told that he might just need an outlet for his temper. The thought that maybe if he went through the Shino Academy that might help. He did have some trouble, at first, getting through due to his temper. He quickly learned when and when not to use it. It took him longer than normal to become a Shinigami because of this. Once he graduated he spent most of his time moving between a few of the different Divisions, never really finding a place to fit in. This again was due to his temper.


    After Aizen created the group that Urahara helped to become the Vizrad's, he continued to experiment. Aizen knew, at that point, that emotion helped the transformation and wanted to see more. He saw Hikaru that same evening while walking away from Urahara. Hikaru had been in a bad mood that day and was in the middle of blowing off some steam when Aizen approached. Hikaru nearly attacked him until he realized that Aizen was a Shinigami like himself. Aizen convinced Hikaru to follow him and became another one of his experiments. As soon as Hikaru learned to control his inner Hollow, Aizen had him join in Division 5. Once he joined the Division, he soon was given the 10th seat. Aizen wanted Hikaru close by, but didn't want to make him to high. Aizen, by the time Hikaru had joined, had become the captain and Gin the Lieutenant.


    Soon afterward there was word of someone in the Rukongai who was going wild. Hikaru was sent out to see if he could find out what was going on. He never found who was going wild or who started the rumor, but he did run into Mizuko Ichikawa while there. She seemed to be struggling in her day to day life. He began to take care of her at that point. He looked after her like she was his younger sister until he was reassigned back to his squad. He taught her how to do most of the basic things in the Rukongai and saw that she was able to support herself just as he was reassigned.


    Once he was back with the squad he continued to train hard. He worked on further controlling the hollow inside as well as keeping the fact he was a vizard hidden. He did well since he didn't use his hollow powers when he fought, especially when around other Shinigami. He mainly stayed away from difficult missions and stuck to guard duty most of the time. When Ichigo and the others invaded the Soul Society to save Rukia, Hikaru was told to say away from them and in the Division barracks. He did this only until he thought that Aizen had been killed. He worked quietly to stay out of sight but he wanted to try to find out what was going on. He was in the trees in the background when Aizen and the others moved to Hueco Mundo. He felt betrayed and left out. As he watched Aizen and the group ascend to Hueco Mundo and he wished he could be up there with them. During the first few weeks after that he worked with Momo Hinimori to bring the squad to some sort of order. Once that was done they worked together to keep the squad organized until Aizen's invasion of Karakura Town.


    Before Aizen's invasion, Hikaru is asked to step in, at one point, to help out the Shino Academy students on a trip. He had taken the small group out to hunt hollows when they come across a powerful one. He was a bit injured after taking it out. This is when he comes across Fuu Uchida. Fuu is an amazing healer that has the ability to use her healing outside of Shikai. The two become fast friends and eventually Fuu falls in love with Hikaru. Hikaru, however, does not return her feelings, much to Fuu's disappointment.  Hikaru did, however, fall in love with her.  He was just afraid to show it due to him not wanting her to see his hollow side should Ignado gain control.


    Hikaru appears on the scene shortly after Rangiku Masamoto is taken out by Mizuko Ichikawa and helps to get rid of the rest of Mizuko's attacks, catching the falling Rangiku Masamoto. He brings her down to the ground and begins to heal her using what little he learned from Fuu, now a member of Division 4. Division 4 members soon showed up and took over. It was around that time that Hikaru noticed the cause of Mizuko's actions, Atsushi Kujo. He went and spoke with Atsushi Kujo to see if he could get the other male to stop his actions. It did not work. Once Aizen is freed from the flames Hikaru made his way over, asking his former Captain if he could be of some help. Aizen was curious to see that Hikaru was still loyal even after what he'd done. Hikaru only replied that he felt a debt to Aizen for what he had done. Aizen then ignored Hikaru and he went back helping out Division 4 or the remaining of the group attacking Karakura town.


    Hikaru did engage in a fight against one of the bad guys, Tetsuya Shimazu. The fight was back and forth with Hikaru winning for a bit. In the end he had to use his mask in order to dodge what could've been a fatal attack. It almost killed him but he was able to be healed by Fuu Uchida.


    He did make it safely back to the Soul Society. Once there he was then sent on a secret mission in Hueco Mundo. During that time, a 3 year period, he was able to learn a little more about himself and his inner hollow. He returned to the Soul Society shortly before Mizuko Ichikawa returned. He remained in the 5th Division, laying low and working to ensure that he does not show proof of the fact that he is a Vizard. He continues to try to move up to a different seat, but is a bit timid in trying to work his way up. This is mostly due to the fact that, as before, he does not want to reval his true self for fear that he will be kicked out of the Soul Society.  As time progressed the Division soon became Captain less and Lieutenant less.  Most of the other seated positions were missing as well.  Due to this Hikaru was asked to step up and become a temporary Vice Captain.  As he continued to work and prove himself he sound found the spot most enjoyable.  He then applied for and soon obtained the rank of Vice Captain.  He now performs most of the duties of the Captain since his Division is still Captain less.


    One day, about 2 years ago, Hikaru found that he was having a bad day.  When he normally has a bad day he wonders over to a secluded area where his parents have a quiet Victorian home and vents out his frustration away from everyone so that no one would get hurt, mainly by Ignado, should he take over.  It was at this time that he felt he needed to vent when Fuu had deiced to follow him.  Hikaru normally left notices behind not to bother him or come looking for him due to him knowing what needed to be done to calm himself down.  Fuu had been watching Hikaru from a distance and saw that he was letting out some steam in a fit of rage.  When Fuu saw this she wanted to help.  She slowly began to approach him.  When Hikaru heard her and turned around to face her, a crazed look in his eyes.  Fuu kept asking if she could help him and if he was alright.  He only told her to run away and leave him alone.  She would not and eventually Ignado took over.  Fuu had never see Hikaru like that before and was shocked to see that the mask that had formed on Hikaru's face.  Fuu stepped back a few steps and Hikaru, now hollowfied, followed her.  As Hikaru followed her he drew his sword.  Fuu, in her hast, soon tripped on a rock and fell down.  Hikaru, still being controlled by the hollow, took this chance to rape and then killed her.  Hikaru had watched all of this in the background, Ignado was fully in charge.  With Fuu dead he began to fight for control.  Eventually, after a few hours, was able to take back control, but it was too late for him to save Fuu.  He was devastated and it took him weeks to recover.  He did bring her back to the Soul Society and made up the excuse that she was killed by a hollow and that he could not get it in time to save her.  They believed the story, but they still keep a close watch on him.  This is mainly due to rumors that he is a Vizard.  He tells everyone he is not and demands proof that he is.  Since no one can ever prove it, he tells them to mind their own business and goes about his daily life.


    In the last 30 years he has had more trouble controlling his hollow, Ignado. He also has had desires to do bad things such as betray the Soul Society. He's been working his hardest to avoid giving in to those feelings, but, a push in that direction from anyone or getting kicked out of the Soul Society may make him turn. This changed when he somehow found himself in the new universe he was in. Ignado seemed to calm down and almost vanish. It was here that he just began to live his life and soon became the VC of Division 5.



    RP Sample: (Show off your posting skills, keep in mind this should mirror how you will normally post. Secondly; Higher positions in Orgs(Espada 3+, etc) require the RP Sample, as do Apps aiming for 0-4+.)


    It seemed to be the typical morning for Hikaru.  He woke up and followed the same routine as he always did.  He'd get up, wash, and get dressed.  All seemed well in his life.  This was about to change, however.


    Hikaru had finished up his breakfast and went out to the sparing area where he'd be sparing with his Captain and Vice Captain as was his usual routine.  His Captain, however, had an assignment for him.


    Hikaru, just the person I wanted to see.  I've got an assignment for you.  I don't know how long it will last but you must report to me weekly on the status of your mission.


    But I've never been given a mission before.  Why start now?


    I've been under pressure to give you a mission.  I feel this one may be very easy for you and, should certain things happen, things will be easy to explain and be taken care off.  Are you ready for the details of this mission?


    Yes Captain.  I'll do my best to complete the mission with no incidents.


    There have been reported incidents in the Roukongi of hollow attacks centered in one area.  You are to go to that area and see if this truly is a hollow, or something else.  If it is a hollow you are to take it out at once.  If not, see what you can do.  There have been rumors that the hollow is actually a person who changes to a hollow.  This is why I selected you for this mission.  You and your hollow powers can help me out if this is a person.


    Yes sir Captain sir.  I won't let you down and will work to bring everything back under control.


    With that being said Hikaru had returned to his room.  He gathered everything he thought he would need for this mission and took off.  The Captain of Division 5 had given Hikaru a packet of information before leaving to his room.  Inside the packet was a map showing the location of where the attacks have been taking place.  Hikaru became a bit excited.  His parents had a home not far away.  He felt this would be the best place to start off and would make this his base of operations till the mission was finished.  Once he had everything he may need he took off.  It was mid-day by the time he reached his house.


    As Hikaru walked in he realized just how dusty the place was.  He'd not been there in quiet sometime.  The house was a beautiful Victorian home that had 5 bedrooms and 3 bathrooms.  It had one large kitchen with a dinning area, a den, and a living room.  In the back was a spacious porch with a swinging chair on it.  The house overlooked a beautiful lake off in the distance.  Since the house was rather dusty Hikaru took a bit of time to clean up a bit.  He then headed out to look for this person they called a hollow.


    Hikaru walked through the Rukongi area where the map had shown the hollow had shown up.  He was about to give up on his search for the day when he heard people yelling something about a hollow.  He ran towards the direction that the people were running away from.  He knew this must be what he was after.  Upon arriving he saw what looked to be a hollow, but it seemed like it was human as well.  The hollow standing before him looked human in nature, but was also dragon like.  She had a long tail that resembles a dragon’s tail.  On her hands and feet where claws for scratching.  Her body was covered in blue scales from head to foot.  Her face seemed dragon like as well.  She had the snout of a dragon, her ears where on top of her head rather than where they normally would be, and her eyes were yellow with slits down the middle.  Hikaru walked up to the hollow/human and attempted to speak with it, thinking that he'd try to calm her down first.  It only threw him against the wall.  He quickly recovered and drew his zanpakuto.  He then charged in, attempting to hit it with his sword.  She blocked and was about to swipe at him with her clawed hand. Hikaru ducked and, when he stood back up, delivered a swift but hard kick to her mid-section.  This seemed to have done the trick since it did knock her out.  Once she was knocked out she reverted back to normal, but naked.  Felling it best not to leave her here as she was, Hikaru picked her up and took her back to his house.


    It was a few hours later when the girl finally woke up.  Hikaru was by her side.  He had so many questions, and was sure she had many questions herself.  He first made sure she was comfortable and was not thirsty.  After that, he began to ask her some questions.


    Welcome to my home.  My name is Hikaru Shibata.  I found you in need of some assistance and brought you here.  What is your name?


    Mizuko Ichikawa.  Why are you helping me?


    Becaue you needed help Mizuko.  How long have you been able to do what is was I saw you do?


    I don't really know what your talking about.  All I know is that one minute I'm getting really upset and the next thing I know, I wake up with a small headache and no memory of what happened to me.


    I see.  Maybe I can help you with that, if that is alright with you.  I can help you to where you won't blank out any more.  I'll even try to see if I can cure you.


    That would be wonderful.  Thank you Hikaru.


    From that day on Hikaru helped Mizuko to be better at controlling her other side.  Eventually, due to her lack of control, Hikaru and Captain Aizen locked the hollow side away, wiping out some of Mizuko's memories in the process.  This is why Mizuko actually thinks she is newer to the Soul Society than she really is.

    #3 Re: Hikaru Shibata (rework with new template) on Sat May 11, 2013 12:41 pm

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    Alright, cuz you asked me to look at this profile I will.


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    Appearance is good and so is personality. They are both reasonably fair lengths, though you could try, should you desire, to add in more specific or defined details. In my opinion, you hit all the necessary points though with them.

    The sealed zanpakuto image is too big for the spoiler box, lol.
    Not a big deal, as anyone can just open it in a new tab/window, but would look better if you resized it.



    Fire Sniper Blast

      You said there was a limit on this ability in that if he uses it in full, which I'm assuming is the 24 volley, then there is a cool down of three posts. I don't think that is actually necessary seeing as it is the whole bases of his Shikai. In my opinion, you can remove this limit and freely fire off up to 24 fireballs each and every posts with little drawback.

    • There is no wait to use the attack but Hikaru is not able to use the attack for the rest of the battle due to this attack working best when the enemy is not aware of him. If is does wish to use this attack again during battle there is a 3 post cool down.

      That is what I am referring too. It's a hefty limit on a very simple and straight forward ability, especially if it is the nature of his Shikai. I wouldn't complain if that 3 post cool down vanished as the ability is simple, straight forward and balanced already seeing as the more he creates the weaker it is anyway. This is just my recommendation. You do not have to lessen the limit if you do not want too.




    Wolf Blaze

      I read the description of Bankai and was curious when I read the description for Wolf Blaze. Is Ken visible while the Bankai is maintained? Like for others to see? If so, I think that should be mentioned in the Bankai description. If wolf blaze itself materializes Ken then that techniques so describe that. Where Ken comes from, any different features he has, and any capabilities other than the forward rush.

      I think this is another one that you could lessen the limit of. I think you could limit the cool down to 2:5 instead of 5:9. The attack is mighty, but you are at full power in Bankai and should have more control and great enough power to use a high power ability like that multiple times consecutively. I think your limit is hefty and I think a 2:5 one is more balanced for that techniques.

    • This attack is not able to be used again for 5 posts if used by itself and 9 if combined with Blaze Wolf Tremor.

      That's what I'm referring too. Again, you don't have to change it if you are comfortable with that, but I can't imagine any thread where you will be able to use a technique 9 posts later. You'll have to be fairly tired or the fight would be over and it's nice to get to use your techniques more often than once, especially if you are at full power.




    Dark Cero

      Also, not a big deal, but for the Dark Cero, you could, instead, use a Gran Ray Cero with that same attribute. Would imply that it is much stronger than the other two Cero he can do, but that is up to you. I just figured three cero techniques of the same level were a little repetitive, but its your choice. They do have different characteristics, which is what makes them unique, but I would suggest maybe upping the scale a bit with a Gran Ray. I would allow Hikaru, who is a powerful Vizard, to have that skill should you apply for it. I think it would be completely allowable. Though I dunno if it actually common on this site to allow Vizards to have the skill. Up to other mods on that one, but that is just what I believe.




    History

      History is excellent. The rape and killed part surprised me though, lol. Great though. Very concise, yet still plenty detailed and full. I'm honestly surprised at all the connects made inside it. That's a really excellent bio, in my opinion, that incorporates posts and players and more than one mind. It's not one individual making a very long history that is completely made up or baseless. Your history is very strong. Stronger than a lot of other histories and I'd like to commend you on how you went about making it. You made it more solid and more integrated into the site by making an additional effort to bring more than one brain into it's composition and I believe that doing that deserves the highest marks. It really was a good read too. Hikaru and his nasty temper always causing trouble, huh?

      Excellent job on that.




    Rp Sample

      One thing I'm curious about for the Rp sample. You made it fairly clear that Hikaru was paranoid in revealing his Hollow so I'm wondering how his Captain found out? I figured Hikaru was the type to run away before being caught and the bio doesn't mention that his Captain, or any of his squad mates, were aware.

    • He remained in the 5th Division, laying low and working to ensure that he does not show proof of the fact that he is a Vizard.

      Just wondering about that.

      The Rp sample is a good length. Good enough to warrant a bonus. Good work on that too.


    Tier Assessment

      In my opinion, your character is very strong. You don't need any additional abilities nor should be be dinged for not having enough abilities or be asked to make more. As far as I read, in Bankai your character as 8 very versatile and very powerful attacks with side effects and even a hollow boost to kick things up all the more. You justified this number of abilities too, so I believe you should keep this number. I think your character is balanced and has realistic weaknesses and strengths and isn't just a stack of many powerful abilities with hardly any realistic, reasonable, or applicable drawbacks. Your character is built well and the techniques are strong, many different styles and natures, and very diverse; your abilities are excellent, finely detailed, and well written.

      I believe your history is fantastic. I like the way it is written and it has good length. I'm definitely not going to count how many sentences it is, because that isn't very smart, but the quality and length are deserving of our highest grades, of that I am sure. The personality and appearance could be dragged out a little more, but they are pretty good. I wouldn't say highest marks, but up there because they are a reasonable length.

      Descriptions of appearances could be a little longer, but, again in my opinion, you have pictures for a reason right? I'm not blind or retarded so I don't need you to overly detail what I can clearly see. I really wouldn't ding you not on overly detailing any appearance fields, but you could make them longer if you wanted a fuller profile.

      All the non-essentials are met. You have your likes, strengths, and all the stuff like that.

      This profile is worth a 1-2 to 1-1 grade I think. I'm not really sure what you were originally beyond 1-3, cuz I'm sure you probably applied for that time skip bonus and that you may have been in a training thread, but I don't think it is above a 1-1 honestly. That is just my opinion based on these overly dramatic standards established by bitch ass Divus. Certain things could be more detailed and other things could be lengthened, but over all it is a wonderful profile and I would accept it at 1-1 completely.


      Good job. That is my opinion on the entire profile and no, I don't plan on using bitch ass Divus' grading template. :3



    Last edited by Cole on Sat May 11, 2013 12:58 pm; edited 6 times in total (Reason for editing : I might have a little...OCD ok!? OK!?)

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    Name of Character: Hikaru Shibata
    Race: Vizard
    Ready for Approval: yes
    Changes Needed: optional
    Comments:
    While this character is pretty interesting, I find that the list of cero are pretty redundant- most if not all of them do the same thing, but just differently.
    As far as General techs- I feel you would be quite under-powered without these; it is optional if you want these or not, but you would be at a disadvantage without them.
    Another thing, Vizard cannot have Gran Ray Cero; so a simple variation of a cero to your expertise would be a better suited option.


    Summary:
    A good app, but lacking a few pointers, a little more work & consideration would be required for a decent tier approval. If modification are made, I would like to see this application at 1-1

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    Approved: Optional

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    Tier Assessment: N/A

      Appearance: Good +2
      Personality: Good +2
      Combat: Average +2
      History: Good +2
      RP Sample: Average +1


    Overall Quality: A great effort, the character clearly has thought behind it and he isn't just some cookie cutter character. But he doesn't stand out as amazing. Nevertheless, well written and few errors.
    Appearance: 3+
    Personality: 3+
    History: 10+
    RP Sample: 6+

    You meet all the length requirements, but the character itself falls a little short. Approved for 3-2.

    Unfortunately since no one will actually have their visored powers at the start of the reboot, we will have to ask you to remove any mention of that from your history. However anything you remove will not be subtracted from your paragraph count. Your inner hollow must simply be dormant for now. You will be notified when the chance to awaken those powers arrives in the plot.

    There are a few techniques that still mention the old stat system. That is the only real problem with them though, so please just remove mention of the stats.


    Ability Name: Darkness Enhancement


    Ability Description: This ability allows Hikaru to use his Shikai techniques in Bankai and enhances them with Darkness, allowing them to be hidden in the shadows or in the dark of night, allowing for a 10% greater chance of being hit by them.

    If you want to still have the use of your shikai techniques in bankai form then they will have to take up bankai technique slots. You've used 3 so pick 3 shikai techniques to post as stronger versions of themselves or replace the bankai techniques you've got.

    You also make mention of "Ken" as if a real wolf is there with you. But your bankai description doesn't mention the wolf and the appearance img is broken. If you want your bankai's form to be a wolf, then you shouldn't have a weapon because it is your weapon that becomes the wolf. Mayuri Kurotsuchi and Unohana Retsu are both good examples of shinigami who's zanpakutou transform into "creatures" and in both cases they are left without weapons.

    Please update the changes and this will be ready for approval.

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    updated once more and ready for look over.

    #7 Re: Hikaru Shibata (rework with new template) on Wed Jul 31, 2013 10:18 am

    Just make that last edit I PMed you and approved for 3-2!

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    You just need one more approval now :3

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    #9 Re: Hikaru Shibata (rework with new template) on Wed Aug 07, 2013 12:57 am

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    Okay, you're good to go. Approved for 3-2 tier.

    Moved to approved applications and locked.

    #10 Re: Hikaru Shibata (rework with new template) on Sat Jan 03, 2015 8:41 pm

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    This character has moved up a tier, making the current tier 3-1.

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