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on Thu Dec 06, 2012 11:36 am

Identity of a Soul

Name: Yorudan
Alias: The Surgeon, The Mad Surgeon
Age: Yorudan has been a hollow for 3,000 years.
Age of Appearance: Yorudan doesn’t appear to be any older than an early to mid-twenty something.
Gender: Male
Race/Species: Arrancar (Adjucha)


What Makes a 'Person'

Appearance: Yorudan stands confidently at five feet and eight inches. His smooth, deep umber colored skin resembles tarnished copper when the sun is at its highest point. He has wide almond shaped eyes, gold in color with overly exaggerated limbal rings and full lips. His high chiseled cheek bones are contrasted by heart shaped jawline. His braided hair is near waist length and is black in color There are nearly a dozen gold and black spots of various sizes that appear around his eyes, temples, and neck. His face while in this form is a work of fine art, the complete opposite of the abstract nightmarish one he dawns while in his resurrected state.

His body is tight and toned. He appears to be physically fit, which surprised many considering he's not what anyone thinks of when athleticism is mentioned; he is after all a scientist type. He has what would be considered a long neck by the average person’s standards and this stretches above slightly broad angular shoulders. His legs and arms are long in proportion to his torso. In short, he has a runner's body.
Style/Clothing: He typically wheres a style of long fitted kosode which drapes loosely, yet comfortably from his shoulders. It's made primarily with a black material. The back of his always depicts in great detail an object of relevance or personal meaning. A kosode may depict in great, and intricately stitched detail Hueco Mundo's moon, his first form as a Gillian, an important event, etc.. The kosode shows his Hollow hole.

He wears white tabi and traditional Japanese style wooden sandals though they are carved from the nontraditional medium of black ebony wood.
Tattoo's/Scars/Etc: He has no tattoos, only markings gained after deciding to remove his mask and ascend into the ranks of Arrancar. These hollow markings, both gold and black in color, appear as small spots around eyes, temples, and neck.
Personality: Witty, often sarcastic sarcastic, happy, and at times bitter. Yorudan is much kinder than one would expect an Arrancar to be. He is kinder still considering that he is a scientist. Unlike other Hollows or Arrancar that may view weaker beings as mere food or sport, Yorudan does not. He sees much of himself in those others would deem weak. Because of this, he is respectful to a point. He does have power, and if someone weaker than himself has something that he wants, he may use that power to take it. He is still an Arrancar after all. This is not to say that he strong arms people outright. He will use force as a last result though.

Those who most often possess something he wants are Hollows he wishes to experiment on. Again, because he sees much of himself in weaker Hollows he has a certain level of empathy. Those Hollows that are experimented on are treated with as much respect and "dignity" one could expect given the circumstances. Experiments are rarely ever killed or even turned handicap by his experiments. In most cases he would rather end testing than risk permanently crippling a subject.

The majority of his assistants were at one time test subjects who developed a close bond with Yorudan; a preview to his kindness. The majority wished to give up a violent and miserable existence prowling through Hueco Mundo never knowing if the next fight would be their last.
He doesn't view those who have bonded to him as friends as they may view him. He instead views them as business associates, or partners. They provide him services, and he returns the favor.

As stupid as it sounds he tries to avoid making enemies. This doesn't however, mean that he presents himself as a push over. When push comes to shove, he would rather side step and allow the potential enemy to stumble due to their own choices.

When angered, associates know to stay clear, enemies, wouldn't necessarily be able to tell though. When dealing with enemies his intentions may change from something that is still seemingly passive aggressive to pure aggression at first hidden in passive aggression. Comments that were perhaps at one time geared towards just pissing someone off, may be done with intention of causing a slip up and opening to deal an actual blow.

This being said, in his three-thousand years of existence there are very few things that can push him to that point of anger. The first is betrayal. This is unforgivable without just reason. Betrayal for self preservation shows a lack of honor, which even as a scientist which pokes and probes, Yorudan possesses. The second thing that infuriates Yorudan are those who believe themselves to be superior just based on natural powers granted. While he has spent a couple thousand years developing his own power through old fashioned methods, he believes that his current standing is due entirely to his creativity and intellect with his natural abilities playing only a small part. Hearing comments which state the contrary make him feel as though he's wasting his time chasing something that doesn't exist.

He would never deny that killing isn't a part of not only his, but every hollow's nature. He won't hesitate to kill when his own life is in danger. He can be convinced to kill if he feels as though he owes the person asking a favor. When ending the existence of another, he prefers to make things quick for both person's sakes.

He is vengeful. It's important to not that this doesn't man he allows his desire for vengeance consume him or make him sloppy, no. He will bide his time if necessary. Achieving vengeance for him is like an unnecessary chore. It can be done, but it can wait. He can compartmentalize very well to avoid becoming too focused on it to the point where he's simply enraged.

Yorudan's dream of becoming his ultimate self, or THEE Apex Predator or Life-Form, is his life. And he believes his creativity is they key to achieving this. He doesn't fool himself into thinking that this is an easy task, after all he's had thousands of years to learn that the life of an Arrancar is not easy. He's also not fool enough to belief that once he gets there he will achieve perfection. He acknowledges that adaptation and change is necessary even for the apex life-form. He's entertained the very real possibility that he's wasting his life by chasing something that will always be out of reach to him. Still, he tries.

Whilst traveling through the human world he discovered avacado. Though he can't stand the fruit by itself, h believes that the perfect taco is not achievable without it. That is Yorudan.
[color=#CDAD00]Fighting Style: Yorudan prefers not to fight. He considers himself a researcher, even though he wishes to become an apex predator. If sealed, he mostly acts in the defensive, attacking only when his back is against the wall. He utilizes his intelligence and cunning to both avoid and deflect attacks. In his resurrected form, he fights differently. Perhaps due to instinct or pride in his newly acquired form, he has no problem going on the offensive, though he relies heavily on his intelligence. While on the offensive his style utilizes very strange striking stances, new found balance, flexibility, and sublime acrobatic skills. These are often used in combination to bait opponents into setting themselves up to fall prey to fatal blows. He relies on an enemy’s frustration when he can but will put his own battle know how and intellect against an opponent when he must. Truthfully speaking, the latter is what he feels most comfortable doing.
(For Likes, Dislikes, Ambitions, etc, go for 1-3 sentences per point, more if you wish.)
Likes:

  • Biology/Evolution-The study of organisms both living and spiritual. His own evolution from scavenger to predator is important to him.
  • Art- Yorudan describes many things, many talents as art though it's not an intense fascination of his.
  • Experimentation- Every experiment is a successful experiment whether it yields the results he expected or not. The ONLY failure is one that he doesn’t walk away from knowing more than he did prior to performing it.
  • Intelligence-This is respected in both friend and foe. One that he deems intellectually superior is shown the utmost respect.
  • Culinary Arts- Or chemistry that is SAFE to eat, as he would call it. He’s the best cook he’s come across in both Hueco Mundo and the Human world.
  • Shinigami Meat- Ambrosia, grade AA spiritual meat, he has a few names for it. This is by far the most succulent ingredient anyone can add to a meal. The brain makes the fluffiest, moistest soufflés. The kidney and liver, the most decadent, pungent, and rich mousses. One can NOT go wrong when adding Shinigami to a meal. A sprinkling of sundried skin on pasta, surpasses any parmesan. A few sprigs of bone atop a pie for a crispy topping is enough to pull him out of the deepest rut.
  • Vengeance- Perhaps due to the fact that when he was just starting out as a Hollow he could do nothing against those who sought to harm him, or perhaps it’s just to show someone that he isn’t the guy you want to try to pull one over on. He will always seek vengeance. The feeling that he gets from it is very fulfilling.
  • Mentor/Mentee Relationships- He believes that he is only alive today because someone took him under their wing when he was struggling in Hueco Mundo.
  • Recovery- After a defeat he managed to survive, he knows that by picking himself up, and brushing himself off, he’ll become better than he was prior.
  • Skilled Tailors/Seamstresses- To him, those who practice the art of stitching and can stitch fine details are surgeons, only with fabric instead of flesh.
  • Engineers- Those that create or understand electronics to the same degree or better, that he understands organisms are admired and respected.
  • Sentimentalism- He's quite the sentimental guy himself. He even wears images that represent moments he's enjoyed in the past stitched into the back of his kosode.


Dislikes:

  • Sharks- Too reminiscent of a hollow he once battled.
  • Whales- Too reminiscent of a hollow he once battled.
  • Squids- Too reminiscent of a hollow he once battled.
  • Octopus- Too reminiscent of a hollow he once battled.
  • Sea Turtles- Too reminiscent of a hollow he once battled.
  • Stupid people-This is especially the case when they are stupid but strong.
  • Quincies- They’re a growing fascination and rude annoyance. Any time he’s attempted to get to know one, they began shooting arrows after seeing his Hollow hole. He’s still a bit curious as to what they taste like, however, for now, Shinigami is enough to distract him.
  • Wasting Time- As immortal as he may be, he is in somewhat of a rush to complete his dream. Wasting time doesn’t mean studying or experimenting, or doing anything but chase his current dream. Wasting time is doing something he doesn’t want to do and isn’t beneficial to him achieving his goals; like kissing up to the Espada.
  • The Espada- A pain in the ass, each and every generation. He was asked about the possibility of joining the group of then just savage warlords, when they were first founded. After refusing their relationship went from nonexistent, to bully and bullied. It was clear to the Primera at the time that he was no threat, but still, refusing an offer seemed to bruise his ego. Yorudan has spent some time kissing up to the Primera and Espada every so often, like when a new Espada is inducted. This is of course to show them that he is not a threat, and just wishes to be left alone.

Ambitions/Dreams/Goals:

  • First and foremost he dreams of becoming what he would deem an apex predator, a hunter with nothing to fear from those who he hunts.
  • The power of bifurcation. He’s compiled a list of Hollow abilities that he can potentially gain through his grafting surgery. He’s already gained the first which was autonomy. He has a few estimated guesses in regards to how this addition will change his resurrected state but he hasn’t perfect the ability to tell exactly how he’ll be altered. He believes that after achieving another power he will though.
  • The power of self resurrection. This power would make him truly immortal. Though he hasn’t encountered one with it, he believes that it exist somewhere.
  • He has dreams of rewarding those who’ve helped him get to where he is in ways they can’t even imagine. He is anything but ungrateful. He would make each of his subordinates gods if he could.
  • Since the start of the industrialized food age, he’s had dreams of owning either a fine dining restaurant where Shinigami was on the menu every day, or a free range Shinigami farm. They can roam freely, get plenty of Hueco Mundo moonlight and fresh air they want. They’d be fed delicious nutrient rich foods to keep their meaty bodies in prime physical condition, all the way up until the time of slaughter, which would be humane of course.
  • It’s not something he’s immediately concerned with, but he would like to discover who he was prior to being reborn as an Arrancar. He thinks he may have been either a witch doctor or royal cook.

Strengths:

  • He’s very intelligent, but he doesn’t rely on this exclusively. He will play on his enemy’s intelligence also, if he knows he is intellectually superior to himself.
  • He is both patient and driven. He once made a 100 year journey across Hueco Mundo, crawling, inch by inch on his belly because he had no limbs at the time, just so that he could either save, or avenge someone who he believed to be a friend.
  • He adapts quickly not only in battle, but in other areas as well.
  • He has a very abstract thought process and mind set. As a scientist this is a valuable asset which often allows him to approach a query from unusual angles for one of a kind results.
  • He’s good at negotiating. He’s gained a few dozen subordinates through negotiation.
  • He is good at spotting potential. This is perhaps due to the abstract thought process mentioned earlier. Whereas others look at someone of something for what it is in that moment, he sees it for what it can be.
  • He knows when to be humble and when to flaunt his talents. He isn’t just one note all of the time. If it’s beneficial, he can instantly go from exceedingly confident to humble.

Fears & Weaknesses:

  • While in his sealed state, he lacks good melee combat ability. This barely changes in his released state.
  • He is indifferent when it comes to authority, but gets annoyed when what the authority’s goal fails because of the authority’s incompetence.
  • A major fear is to one day wake to a world without life. Waking up to find that he is the only being in existence is depressing. A world without life is a world without avacados and Shinigami meat.
  • Another fear is to drift into space with no one and nothing but cold emptiness. This is even worse than waking to a world without life, because he would know that life exist but it wouldn’t matter, he couldn’t interact with it. He could eat the delectable avocado fruits or tender Shinigami.
  • His biggest fear is to one day find that all of the evolutionary progress he's made has been for nothing. He’s only just started his journey and has only had one success. He needs more successful experimentations (at least one more) before learning whether his goal is only achievable in theory.
  • Waking up to a world where Shinigami don’t exist. Is an explanation really needed for this? Oh what a bland world this would become.



Gene's of a Race


Hollow/Arrancar Specifics

List of 'Auto-Known' Skills:

Arrancar DO NOT need to list the following:

  • Cero
  • Sonido
  • Bala

Hollows DO NOT need to list cero.

Hollow Type: Adjuchas
Hollow Reasoning: It is unknown whether he did eve choose. His last memory of life is his death. All that he remembers are feelings of extremely intense anger and hatred. Perhaps it was unintentional.
Hollow Hole Location & Appearance: The center of his collar bone.
Mask Appearance: (Only for Non-Arrancar Hollow, Delete if not needed. What does your characters mask look like? Any unique markings? etc.)
Mask Fragment Appearance & Location: Yorudan’s mask was removed completely. One wouldn’t know he was an Arrancar were it not for his visible hollow hole. The only way to really tell that he is an Arrancar is by the hole in his chest.
Hierro Armoring: He doesn’t have Hiero. His form doesn’t need it thanks to his specialty.
Hollow Specialty: Advanced regenerative capabilities and genetic manipulation. Also reiatsu mapping/ sensing.
Number & Location: He has no number.
Aspect of Death: Does not apply.

A Hollow's Weapon

Weapon Name: Apex Dream
Weapon Appearance: Apex Dream is a predominantly pitch black khopesh style sword. The material the blade appears to be crafted from is obsidian. The hilt however has the look of ebony wood. It has edges on both sides. These edges are lined in gold. The sword's sheath is a simple black one wrapped in fine cloth which is the same cloth that allows the blade to dangle from his neck as if the whole zanpakuto were an over-sized decorative pendant. Since the merger of the realms Yorudan has discovered the design's origins in Eastern Africa.



Battle Information

Elemental Affinity: Non-traditional; hardly “elements” at all. More so manipulation of the different phases of matter of his vomit. Also, biology.

Ability/Abilities: (These are traits your character was either born with or attained through special circumstances. They cannot be taught to or learned by others. Examples would be fire elemental reiatsu, unnaturally sharp reiatsu sensing, and genetic mutations.) Non-Arrancar Limit: 2. Arrancar Limit: 3

    Ability Name: Advanced/Hyper Accelerated Regeneration
    Ability Description: His primary ability goes beyond typical regeneration of limbs and branches into cellular regeneration of organ tissues. Further still, if tissues are destroyed or their operation/homeostasis hindered by some type of something foreign, like a toxin or poison for example, new cells which replace the organs develop a sublime resistance. Regeneration of limbs occurs over 3 or 4 post. Regeneration of organs occurs over 6 to 8 post. This doesn't include healing of a battered brain which even his ability isn't advanced enough to cover. Nor is substantial damage dealt to the heart repaired.

    Ability Name: Vomitar
    Ability Description: The ability to fire continuous streams of
    projectile vomit at high speeds. The force at which it’s launched is equal to that of a pressurized water hose (like what's used by firemen). But this isn’t what makes it troublesome. Yorudan has the ability to instantly and freely change the state of matter of this vomit. It was first discovered that nervousness causes the vomit to flow, fear caused it to harden and crystallize, and happiness caused it to become gaseous. This substance isn't living, it simply responds to his will, taking on the stereotypical properties of various phases of matter. This is often used to hold someone or something in place (liquid to solid or one of the in between phases such as something gelatinous or sticky tack like) but the most destructive effect is caused when this vomit is made to undergo extreme sublimation and made to transform into the fourth state of matter, plasma. This state was discovered in a heightened state of anger. Following the lead of his enraged state his vomit transcended the previously acquired states and turned into a cloud of supercharged radioactive particles which destroy substances at the molecular level. He's had almost 1,000 years to gain mastery of this ability. Since then, he's managed to attain these various phases and everything in between without having to rely on achieving a certain emotional state. This is manipulated strategically, perhaps it’s converted into a gas to create a foul smoke screen, or to simply increase volume to create a bigger mass of matter when it’s converted into a denser state to encompass more space. Perhaps a liquid state is used to get it to seep into cracks and corners that gases can not go. Unfortunately, as of yet he's found it impossible to control the flow with pinpointed accuracy so it's use isn't as malleable as he would like. All present vomit in the open, outside of his body changes its state, not just pinpointed sections. For example half the mass can't be made solid and the other liquid. This requires two wills for instruction, and clearly, he only has one brain. To hold something in place Yorudan's Reiatsu Control is put against the physical force or relevant stat.

    Ability Name: Autonomy
    Ability Description: It was the first time he used his grafting technique. An ability taken from a salamander hollow that possessed a healing ability similar to Yorudan's own, though limb based instead. He originally sought to improve his healing factor, and expand it to not only replace internal organs, but limbs as well. He saw this as necessary being he acquired his Arrancar form earlier. The salamandar hollow that originally possessed the skill could shed limbs at will and cause them to flap about to escape other hollows attempting to eat him. The hollows would go after the lively bits instead of the seemingly dead main body. The body parts were made to flail about by an unseen channel or string of reishi which also serve as artificial nerves or veins, connecting the original point of severance to random tendons and muscle fiber. After acquiring the ability, Yorudan, with his superior skill with manipulating reiatsu found that he could control the limg more accurately by making instead of using thread like channels and connecting them to random bones and muscle fibers, a superior channel is one that works like a radio signal. This way the body part in its entirety maintains full usage. In case of the original user, once a new limb was grown the channel is cut off to form a new reiatsu circulatory path with the new limb. This is the same with Yorudan, after a limb regrows there is no way to send signals to the receiving limb.


General Techniques: (These are moves your character was taught or trained and developed on their own. They are things anyone would be able to learn and perform unless they are dependent on your unique race or abilities. Examples are custom shunpo variations, hakuda/zanjutsu techniques, and using your reiatsu on an object to simulate telekinesis.) Limit 6 (Arrancar have 3 for unarmed/cero based, 3 for sealed weapon based.)

    Technique Name: Evade Pesquisa
    Technique Description: Nearly a thousand years spent in hiding underground from spiritual entities has yielded an detection evasion technique that the most skilled spy would envy. He can completely cut off the spiritual pressure he's emitting.
    Technique Effect Chart:
    *The effect chart is for damage, durability, or any other after effect of a technique. The damage/effect/etc will be based off of tiers.*
    *Passive Ability No Drawback- Second Nature; Always active unless turned off

    Technique Name: Master Pesquisa
    Technique Description: Nearly two thousand years tracking prey with a crew of savage hunters through Hueco Mundo combined with one thousand years hiding from predators has yielded a grand understanding of the art of detecting not only spiritual pressure, but the most minute changes in where reiatsu travels. This isn't merely 'sonar' like detection of reiatsu, but the also an x-ray or map of an entity's reiatsu pool. Through careful sensing Yorudan can properly gauge the overall amount of reiatsu of an entity even if hidden. Even more impressive he can estimate what an entity's strengths are based on how their reiatsu fluctuates during specific actions: have they trained to be good at high speed movement above all else, or regeneration, or do they simply. This can't be fooled because the fluctuations in spiritual pressure when attempting to hold back on a skill are similar to patterns of one trying to go undetected. There is no cool real cool down, however a person must be 'studied' for a few post before the image is complete. Three combative post covers it.
    Technique Effect Chart:
    *The effect chart is for damage, durability, or any other after effect of a technique. The damage/effect/etc will be based off of tiers.*
    Passive Ability, No Drawback-Second Nature


    Technique Name: Stabilizing Interaction
    Technique Description: Precise reiatsu control combined with high level sensing allows Yorudan to grab or knock back energy forces or something like cero or kido without having to worry about it crippling him. This is done mentally, but he can use his hands to give the illusion that it's being done with pure strength.
    Technique Effect Chart:
    *The effect chart is for damage, durability, or any other after effect of a technique. The damage/effect/etc will be based off of tiers.*
    Success Rate with all tiers are based on RC vs RC. If lower than Yorudan’s than the energy can be caught and even deflected back at sender with optimum accuracy. If even then the force is deflected without the ability to accurately guide it away. If higher than Yorudan’s the force is dampened by RC.

    Technique Name: Stable Split
    Technique Description: As a scientist having to constantly cut into persons and objects with the utmost precision, he has learned to mirror the process using only a combination of his conscious mind and precise reiatsu control. Thin sharp pressurized bursts with 'edges' similar in shape to surgical instruments are created within his immediate vicinity(within arms length) and moved rapidly with in the same directional fashion a scalpel or knife is used with as much accuracy as a master surgeon's steady hand . This is used primarily on energy forms like cero, kido, etc. but it’s versatile.
    Technique Effect Chart:
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    With all tiers this is RC versus opposing stat to determine success.


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*From here on is Arrancar only, delete if not used*
Ressurrecion

Ressurrecion Name: Yorudan holds his zanpakuto overhead and says “Reign, Chimera”. His zanpakuto immediately liquefies allowing him to drink it. With the last gulp his form explodes into a mass of black, hot, steamy liquid. His resurrected form rises from that pile.

Ressurrecion Representation: A combination of Hollow’s Yorudan has taken abilities from.
Ressurrecion Appearance: Yorudan’s torso doesn’t change much but his hair is gone. He does sprout a long tail. The length of his tail equals his height. His form is clad in flexible armor looking pieces that are blue, black, and gold in appearance.
His shins and feet lengthen. He now walks on the balls of his feet as one would expect from an amphibian/human hybrid would. The insides of his mouth turn black and his teeth both shrink and sharpen.His dramatic new form is emphasized in the new way that he moves. He’s far more animal like in this regards.
Ressurrecion Ability: In this form Yorudan still utilizes the abilities he uses while in a sealed state.He can also lengthen his tongue several dozen feet and control it with great accuracy. While in this form he can instantly swallow and digest entire forms much larger than himself, that is, as long as they aren’t putting up a fight on the way down. He can either hold something inside of him in which case his form expands to the size and shape of whatever he’s holding. Not digesting something keeps it preserved in a state of suspended animation until it’s regurgitated or digested. If he chooses to digest it, his form doesn’t change at all. In truth, this form is barely any more dangerous than his sealed form is. He views it as a work in process. After all, he's changed his resurrected form before. Only time will tell how his own evolutionary quest will effect this form further.

Ressurrecion Techniques: (These are techniques available only in Ressurrecion. Limit 6)

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on Thu Dec 06, 2012 3:43 pm

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I don't yet say anything as this is WiP, but inform us (the staff) when you're done.

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on Fri Dec 07, 2012 1:25 am

Verdadero La Muerte wrote:I don't yet say anything as this is WiP, but inform us (the staff) when you're done.
No, please, comment. I want to know if I should even bother spending anymore time on this or if I should scrap it, or if I'm even building him correctly.

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on Fri Dec 07, 2012 1:30 am

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Well, i see it has a potential to be a 1-5 or 1-4 app...

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on Fri Dec 07, 2012 6:43 am

Ah, nice to know. However, his abilities are more what I was worrying about? I wasn't sure if they'd be allowed or not or if they need to be fine tuned or something. o_O

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on Fri Dec 07, 2012 8:13 am

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black cat may need to change. Seems too op.

on Fri Dec 07, 2012 11:15 am

Cross, could you give me specifics? What makes him seem OP? I may just completely scrap the character.

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on Sun Dec 09, 2012 4:28 am

Black cat gone, new character created.Yay, ALL DONE! Please review someone. :baaaaaaad:

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on Sun Dec 09, 2012 1:09 pm

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1-5 tier, maybe 2-1

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on Mon Dec 10, 2012 1:09 am

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Hello, and thank you for making an app. I would like to say I enjoyed reading some of the new concepts you've made.

Such as Reverse Reaper. One issue though. Could we get a cooldown on this? It wouldn't be fair if you could use this constantly and negate all attacks used on you, which would thus offset your melee disadvantage.

Stabilizing Interaction, too, needs a bit of a drawback to limit usage.

Stabilizing Split doesn't really need a harsh limit either; something lenient, just to tone down how often he may use it. A cooldown or something similar would be sufficient.

Now while your resureccion is fine.... your age is pushing it. I would've liked to have seen more history for one so old. But you do provide an RP sample and a decent history, so it passes. Just letting you know you're at the minimum for such a high age.

At any rate, I enjoyed reading your character and it is fairly made. Once the edits I requested are made, I approve for 1-4. (Would have been 1-5, but the RP sample boosted you up)

Thank you and have a nice day.

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